I Don'T Wanna Say Goodbye Poem by Isabella Swan

I Don'T Wanna Say Goodbye

Rating: 2.0


So soft
the brief touch of your lips
on my cheek.

Was I almost intruding?

'Look after yourself '
should have been
'I love you! '

Then the Jumbo flew over
my head
and I shouted my love
above the roar
and thundering thrust

... as if you'd hear.

Through the clouds in my eyes
I watched you fly away
and wished I'd been born with wings.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
William Jackson 24 May 2008

Great poem. Well crafted and heart felt. However, kill the 'wanna' and write 'want to' instead. 'Wanna' does not fit with the formality of the rest of your poem.

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Isabella Swan

Isabella Swan

Georgetown, Guyana
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