I Am Clumsy When I Love Poem by Aria Siren

I Am Clumsy When I Love

Rating: 5.0


I am not smooth and fine
Like other girls
With floating steps
Bitten lips and perfect curls

I am clumsy when I love
My words spatter you with the wrong thing
Or my lips crash into each other in a full on stammer
Or my legs find places to wobble and gravity again is king

Those other girls walk up to you
With words whispery and rehearsed
And you catch me rolling my eyes over here
Hand on my hip-lips pursed

Others protect a cloud full of feelings
Secrets well hidden and never seen
While you just have to look at my flushed cheeks
For I neglected to give my thoughts better security

Sweaty palms, shaking hands, babbled speech
Just a few of my afflictions
Why should you choose this stuttering fool
Over a polished woman with more conviction

But for some reason on that night
You walked right over to my concern and surprise
And you ignored all of my imperfections
And you let me talk to you with my eyes

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
If you know me, you know the truth of this poem. I am most definitely not smooth :)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Stevie Taite 13 November 2012

This is beautifully done! How honest and perfect are your descriptions of that awkwardness! I can totally relate to every line. Really enjoyed!

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Ruby Honeytip 28 November 2012

I can see myself not just acting out these words but BEING them lol. Kindred spirit here: -) Love this one! Stevie Taite is awesome btw: -)

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Søren Valentine 27 November 2012

Though I agree with your comment, you are not as bad as you may think. Even if you were, you wouldn't be alone. Anyway, the poem itself is good, I enjoyed the truth in its words. I can see you acting out the movements you describe here, and I can feel the awkwardness presented in the poem. I enjoyed this... :) haha

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Alla Simone 20 November 2012

I loved the whole thing! But some of the highlights are...what tiger said, and: Sweaty palms, shaking hands, babbled speech Just a few of my afflictions Why should you choose this stuttering fool Over a polished woman with more conviction The doubt that we cast on ourselves in connection w/ comparison to others is conveyed well here. And you ignored all of my imperfections And you let me talk to you with my eyes And the feeling of pleasant surprise is expressed so cleverly. Awesome job.

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Kelly Seale 20 November 2012

Aria, This- This is amazing. So honest and true to you. Naked and raw with your feelings, your self-conscienceness... and proud of it. A rare quality in a writer...and a young woman. Outstanding Ink Aria! ! ! ; -) -Kelly.

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Tiger Lily Love 16 November 2012

A very charming and relatable piece! Even though I myself like to think i'm smooth, in reality, thats not true! haha my hands down favorite line: Those other girls walk up to you With words whispery and rehearsed And you catch me rolling my eyes over here Hand on my hip-lips pursed This line both humored me and described my actions exactly at times when I see the object of my affection. Great write! I loved it! :)

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