I Am Poem by Jonathan Maldonado

I Am

Rating: 4.7


I AM

I am nothing you see and everything you dont
I am a forced smile
I am a lost soul behind ambitious eyes
I am a chameleon
i am happy and I am sad
I am lonely
i am the best, but I am no good
I am a quitter
i am a friend, a brother, a son, but I am a stranger
I am NOONE.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Claudia Krizay 24 March 2012

Wow- very powerful- I like the line I am a chameleon- I don't think you are a no one though. Anyone who writes poetry and shares it online is a someone in my eyes! But your feelings are well expressed. CAK

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Fox Tail 25 March 2012

Your poem here is like two different sides of a Kool-Aid bottle. The top, (which is a persons head etc. torso and above,) is sharp, but not too narrow and can still fit ideas through, (how the workers who put the liquid into the beverage put the blue kool-aid in its bottle,) and throw all the negatives away, (how the customer drinks the kool-aid.) Now the bottom part of the Kool-Aid bottle is where you stand in poetic life. Many people look at your work, (shoppers in a grocery store passing you in the aisle,) but some decide to actually check your work, (some shoppers actually pick up the kool-aid to buy,) but that doesn't mean that many won't check your work 'cause your fame will eventually grow and such, (advertisements of kool-aid, great works of kool-aid [like the blue kool-aid, ] and knowing the right people, [like stater brows, food for less, walmart etc.]) if this makes sense to you. GREAT. if it doesn't. I CAN'T BLAME YOU it was confusing. -Fox_TaIL-

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Danny Draper 25 March 2012

Wooooo! Noone, is that like no one at mid day? This was good a balance between Irony and contradiction with a touch of self depreciation. A wise woman once said no one will ever truly know you completely.

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Jessica Penner 26 March 2012

good poem bt how about adding I am NOONE, but I am SOMEONE, cuz u really are.

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Edward Kofi Louis 17 November 2018

A forced smile! Thanks for sharing.

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Rebecca Navarre 03 September 2017

Wow! ! ! ! ! Incredibly Deep! ! ! ! ! Very Heart Felt! ! ! ! ! Thank You! ! ! ! ! Ever So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Ever So Many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ++++++

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Ramesh Rai 25 September 2014

In Gita Lord Krishna said, You are no one and your existence deliberately meets the cosmic. A brilliant wise and deep write.

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Brian Johnston 13 January 2014

Maybe you could add the line I am a picket fence between you and my soul We can get tiny glimpses of the real you but mostly we get frustration and alienation when clearly you are more. You are a poet, a diver into deep pools of feeling. Those things alone offer the possibilities of miracles. But Jessica is right. You are in fact a special someone, who is simply afraid. Own it! Fear is a great launching pad for a poet. Keep writing!

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Romeo Della Valle 03 April 2012

Impressive! Jonathan, in life it takes some time to get to know oneself! We all go through this stage some time or another! Please check my poem: Who Am I? and you will see how I vividly express myself (honestly) With well penned, you freely express your inner feelings which takes bravery to do! Thank you for sharing this amazing write and keep it up! God Bless You! Love and Peace for always! Romeo from New York City!

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