How Much We Inflate? Poem by Vidi Writes
How Much We Inflate?
A child is born, carrying over gene
Love surrounds him with its arms
Child wants to reach every corner
Up in the air, flies a Balloon
Child cries to get one for its own
Carries it with delight, runs around.
Grows to be a mesmerized Teen
Love grips him at his belly
Lover just wants to meet a partner
Spends money, buys a Balloon
Puffs a lot, Fills it, just to be blown
Balloon has to fly; lover has to be on the ground.
Another gap of years passes on
Love becomes a quest in mind
Restless Lover looks for a mentor
Collects the pieces of burst Balloon
Sarcastic laugh emerges from frown
Mockery, Mystery and History surround
Middle age, inner vibration cools down
Bow set Love penetrates the heart
Pain, when balanced, kills the predator
Emancipated soul looks at the Balloon
Smirk with acumen, not to mourn
To love from within becomes the bond
Silver lines twinkle thereafter
Love heals the whole self
Insight resonates unto the creator
Tied at one end, flies the Balloon
Hilarity reaches the top to crown
Learn to Inflate, in its scope, not beyond.
-vidi-
15-01-2009
good psychograph of a hide feminine inflation, verymuch impressive theme, well written words thank you author,10++
life game drawn in a philosophical frame...very good write, Vidi...you select a narrative style on your theme from start and maintain it skillfully till the end...and how much we inflate? ...till one desire balloon bursts...another balloon would be always there for the taking and for inflating... ‘Learn to Inflate, in its scope, not beyond’ is a line really good...good piece...thematic write...10
There are 2 schools of thought regarding a'Monotonous Tone', in poetics....The commentor below, is correct in the sense that monotony tends to tone-down the sprite of poetry...and that would be true, if your work here, were one that required a lot of pictorial/imagery.However, the theme, & style you chose, does not require a great deal of imagework.In fact, (IMO) ..it is through the employment of a monotone scheme, that you establish what i think you are attempting to do here...depict a graduated step /sojourn through life...through the eyes, mind & heart of this young man, via parable/lesson/philosophy. Phliolosophical poetics has its' abstract roots... your piece is a comely example of this claim.There be a very fine line, at times, between Monotonousity & Abstractivity.I like it...Solid penning, young lady! F j R 2009
Interesting psychological nuances, but For poetic 'lifting' it is better to release lines from monotonous tone … lines from «monitor» tone … Good luck to you...
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4/24/2024 5:27:07 AM # 1.0.0.1119
a wonderful point of view with layers of meaning to imbibe