Hope Poem by Dozie Wogu

A simple, yet effective poem. Your choice of words in this poem is great. One thing I picked up was a simple grammatical error: ' I know that one I will transform' - should it be 'I know that one day I will transform'? To expand on this point, I was thinking, you could simplify this even further by removing a few words: 'I know that I will transform, From the corruptible form; - That I will be reformed To the incorruptible form...' I also noticed that this poem can be arranged into Stanzas of 4 (quatrains) . Maybe that is something you can think of maybe changing in this poem. Another point I would like to address is that this, I believe, should be a poem to be read aloud. To make that possible, you should think about punctuating this poem. The punctuation can help create/build up mood and atmosphere in the poem and increase the overall effect of the poem upon the reader. If you do not mind, I have written up a quick, sketchy edit which includes my ideas on how you can change/improve this poem. It should also gives you a better idea about what I mean by Punctuation and Poem Structure. I know that I will transform, From the corruptible form; That one day, I will be reformed, To the incorruptible form. Amid this world of failure, I will continue to hope and lure; Amid this world of turmoil, I will keep the hope burning, with my oil. Hope here and now; - Even though I cannot eat now; Hope beyond the grave; - Even though I will go to the grave. Eternal hope, That I must believe; That one day I will live, To see Christ, my Hope. I hope that gives you some idea on how to approach the Stanza Structure and Punctuation idea that I raised early. In conclusion, a good poem and a worthy read. Keep up the great work. PS: Hope you do not mind the lengthy critique.

this is reallly a nice poem...thanks.

That I have to believe That one day I will live To see Christ my Hope I hope you see Christ right now, he's there in your neighbour, always. Good write

A poem which reflects your strong determination to go beyond obstacles and make of Hope your guide...

will keep the hope burning with my oil Hope here and now Even though I cannot eat now Hope beyond the grave, , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , wonderful write by imagery and metaphor, utterly introspective,10++, thanks for sharing

a poem revealing your pain yet hows that you are so sanguine.. brilliantly written brother... regards and love prashant