#hold Poem by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

#hold

Rating: 4.0


come on friends
lets undo this mess
no..no..no
iam not calling you to restructure
i dont believe in any structure
let's just undo this mess
this fabric has worn out
the stretch has torn it
it will not HOLD anymore
weaving another fabric
fabricating another structure
would or may HOLD for sometime
that too would grow old in time

come on friends
lets clean up this mess
let us be our own..on our own
let the fabric be woven within
let the structure be from within
may be then..it will HOLD on forever
till that connectivity blooms
let us bloom and flourish on our own


[we tend to get into folds which we think will keep us in hold
folds are many..nation.religion.caste are afew..so man is multifolded
any crisis to any of these..he has to react..allthese geographical.
cultural, lingual holds would either fail or try to over rule one another..
whatever that has to hold us together should be from within]

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ken E Hall 08 March 2009

Well penned and I see samanyan we are of the same tram tracks when it comes to thinking of ' What a wonderful world it would be if' ' Thankyou for the read regards uavagood1

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Barry A. Lanier 19 March 2009

'rather than generating structures or maintaining folds it seems the merit is in developing the internal consistency'

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this is a very soul full piece. I like your thouhgts.

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Carl Harris 01 April 2009

This is another charming and fairly short poem, samanyan, which is very effective at getting it's point across. I liked your chatty style in this interesting write, which helped make it reader friendly right off the bat. Carl.

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Laron Green Sr. 05 April 2009

nice job, I like it, it's unique.

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Mubeen Sadhika 26 September 2009

Great thought. the narration is so well written. deserves 10+++++++++

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Pandian Angelina 17 July 2009

The foot note of yours does bring out your longing for a true brotherhood. You tell us also to 'Hold' - Stop! Stop what we are doing falling in a rut and asking us to join and make a new weave! A Calling which should be heeded by all! As always your thoughts are so beautiful reminding us of inner salvation above all. Let me Hold my Soul! Angel

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Ashraful Musaddeq 11 June 2009

A beautiful poem with spiritual essence also. It is in favor of mankind.

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Christopher Lee 25 May 2009

i understand the permeation process thro' this poem...great

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ya at cross roads we can do so many things is proper perspectives

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