He Falls Poem by Terry jones

He Falls

Rating: 5.0


He spent his life
caring for his father
a boy of 15
watching him fight
watching him suffer
days to weeks
weeks to months
months to years
then he passed
the boy went into sorrow
but before he fell
he puled himself up
all seemed well
then he lost another
his sister
now he falls
he throws his hands
into the air
into these walls
hes braking down
hes not the same
hes climbing out
claims to be fine
but hes not
his insides broken,
twisted,
mangled,
hurting those he holds dear
no one can help
hes broken and lost
in the pit
as he falls


NOTE: i suppose i should elaborate a bit iv already got a couple of messages from people not understanding. my dad died of hepc a few months ago. i spent my life taking care of him

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Chidori Storm 04 January 2012

Wow. I sorta know what that feels like. I like this poem. It describes a man's pain when he loses something precious to him.

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David Gerardino 04 January 2012

the boy went into sorrow, i see this well, , , for me i had to take care of my mom, who got cancer, or the cancer got her, its very hard to see peaple you love become very ill, , , , , , , , still, there is hope, , , , , , , , , , , ,

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Grant Lovell 04 January 2012

Um, wow. Great, yet sad at the same time. Well-written.

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David Gerardino 04 January 2012

very sad, been there, , , , , , , , , , still there is hope.

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Kelsi Brockway 06 February 2012

Wow. My dad died when i was 9 and it was super hard on me and my family. I spent my life tryin to save him from himself. He died of liver cancer. And even when i was younger i knew that he would die because of his drinking so i used to try and hide the beer.

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Dead Rose 25 January 2012

It's a good poem! ! Rose)))

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Scotty Dogg 12 January 2012

Really good poem, but you shouldn't feel the need to explain. Let the poem stand on it's own (it's good) and everyone can take what they want from it. If they don't like it, or understand it, that's their problem. S

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Minnie Gehrig 11 January 2012

i do like it :) great flow! \

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Julie Vognar 04 January 2012

It's good you write about your feelings now. And the poem makes it easy for the reader to empathise.

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