Haiku Play: T-Combo Poem by Douglas Scotney

Douglas Scotney

Douglas Scotney

Toowoomba, Queensland, Australia. Resides in Adelaide

Haiku Play: T-Combo



For his morning tea
A monk takes utter silence
With chrysanthemums.

For their tea, chrysanthemums
take utter silence with a monk
and a monk with utter silence.

Utter silence takes
Chrysanthemums with a monk
And a monk with chrysanthemums,

And chrysanthemums
With utter silence
Are taken by a monk.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
after a Basho haiku
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Michael Walker 01 March 2018

Very effective reversal of word order in 'monk' and 'chrysanthemum'. Each one takes the other-dazzling.

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Douglas Scotney

Douglas Scotney

Toowoomba, Queensland, Australia. Resides in Adelaide
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