Haiku- Alertness Poem by Valsa George

Haiku- Alertness

Rating: 5.0


A fly fell down dead
Soon ants stage an autopsy
On the ‘cadaver'!

Thursday, January 14, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: haiku
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jayatissa K. Liyanage 15 January 2016

A fly being dead and ants being alive and active, two entities bind together nature's way for a poet to craft a nice Haiku on. That's creative poetry. X

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Geeta Radhakrishna Menon 15 January 2016

To observe carefully the ways of nature and write about them in few words is a remarkable ability.

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Kelly Kurt 15 January 2016

Tho the syllabic count was unconventional, the imagery was impeccable.

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Akhtar Jawad 19 January 2016

And so we will be treated in our graves, everywhere there is a cycle.

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Sylvia Frances Chan 03 August 2020

I never knew the medical terms can be used to describe insects ceremony. Where do they get those medical tools? IF they only be Haiku words An amazing Haiku is composed here. My felicitations, dear Valsa. A Haiku is immortal as you can see now.

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Simone Inez Harriman 14 November 2017

Such a vivid picture of the ants dissection. I will definitly opt for cremation as the thought of insect activity on my dead body is absolutely cringe worthy.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 31 October 2017

After falling down a fly dead the ants started biting and this has been so cutely painted by you as the dissecting of ants on the cadaver. Nice haiku.

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Loke Kok Yee 03 August 2016

autopsy is absolutely correct, nothing left! ! Thanks Valsa

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Hazel Durham 27 January 2016

Hard hitting write about a poor dead fly being dissected by the ever busy ants, great Haiku!

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