Gazing Suicides Poem by Amy Louise Kerswell

Gazing Suicides

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I thought of dying today
Gazing down to the train track below
So shiny and black.

I heard the tracks calling me to join them below.
I heard them say if you want to jump
Then jump go on just jump.

I though I'd chuck myself away
Thought I'd fall below
To the train tracks underneath.

I thought it through and through.
With nothing else left to do
I let the train tracks call me below.

I ve sufferd enough in this evil world
Theres to much evil that lurks.
The world is a sain place for some.
It wasnt for me
I lived a life full of pain.

Things got to much
So I listened to the tracks below me
I knew it made sense for me.

I took the plunge
And I jumped down to the tracks below me
As I fall
I will die below

Things are meant for some
And this was meant for me
The train tracks told me so

Amy Kerswell

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Walt Martin 14 June 2007

No technical critique indicated; I wouldn't, even if I had that degree of expertise , but ... OUCH! I Felt That! ! ! Anyone gifted enough to provoke such a response via the conveyance of emotion, be it bleak, beautiful, or some admixture of both, gets a high mark for ability from this commentator ... Raw as a fourth grade knee slide during a hot June recess ... Painful as any aged sensation can be before the tears initiate the soothing process . Yes, I did feel that. Call it being effective in the art form; Perhaps that's what it's all about. With thanks , walt .

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