Valsa George


Five Liners no.8. A Simple Whim


How I wish to scuttle alone
Over a gentle river from bank to bank
In a small boat rowed with a bamboo pole
While the seagulls fly shrieking over my head
And the clouds sail drawing queer patterns on the sky

Submitted: Monday, February 03, 2014
Edited: Monday, February 03, 2014

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  • Veteran Poet - 3,575 Points Md Asadullah (2/16/2014 1:07:00 AM)

    Beautiful wish just in five lines :) (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,112 Points Diane Hine (2/13/2014 5:42:00 AM)

    I'm not much of a sailor but you make it sound very inviting. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,586 Points Bri Edwards (2/7/2014 1:40:00 PM)

    valsa, i hope you don't mean to use scuttle THIS WAY!

    1. (Nautical Terms) nautical (tr) to cause (a vessel) to sink by opening the seacocks or making holes in the bottom

    i'll send other private comments madam. :) bri thanks for sharing. i enjoyed it.
    p.s. wear a broad-brimmed hat unless you don't mind gull poop in your hair! ....to MyPoemLIst. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,059 Points Kanav Justa (2/5/2014 4:14:00 AM)

    And the clouds sail drawing queer patterns on the sky , , , ,

    looking up at the sky to see clouds change so strangely is a delight for the eyes, , , , (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,554 Points Dinesh Nair (2/4/2014 10:03:00 AM)

    A fine whim quite naturally expressed madam. But your small boat has to take you on after realising that at the sea-mouth strong currents are awaiting.
    One hopes your gentle river never rushes towards such a sea at all so that as a small sailor lost in this pleasant past time you will rejoice to no end. A good five liner with fifty pleasant ripples surfacing its gentle face. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 7,536 Points Geetha Jayakumar (2/3/2014 9:48:00 AM)

    Beautiful imagery of words painted in canvas. I could picturise it well. Loved the way you presented it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,668 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (2/3/2014 8:34:00 AM)

    Difficulties come one after the other. Life is hard. Beautiful poem. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,463 Points * Sunprincess * (2/3/2014 7:00:00 AM)

    .....sounds very peaceful...I wonder where you would be going...
    .it must be somewhere nice.... (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,243 Points Pradip Chattopadhyay (2/3/2014 6:17:00 AM)

    I get the view, I have been to river banks of late. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,255 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (2/3/2014 3:38:00 AM)

    The great imagery as good as heavenly............Valsa...............nicely composed......... (Report) Reply

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