Fireworks Poem by Holly Somer

Fireworks

Rating: 5.0


Colorful sparks bursts
Traveling across the sky
People look and are amazed
They want more to brighten up the sky
Purple, Blue, Red and Yellow form a cloud
A beautiful cloud that would beat a sunsets beauty anyday

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
William Jackson 04 July 2007

I give you a ten for 'Fireworks'. Well said! Suggestions: Change 'bursts' to burst. Add a comma after burst and add a period after 'sky' in both place. Add a comma after cloud. Change sunsets to sunset's. Add a period at the very end after any day.

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This truely discribes fireworks. Awesome Job Holly! ! ! ! ! Sun ♥

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