Valerie Dohren

Freshman - 1,979 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Fields of Green Velvet


Lay me down gently in fields of green velvet
Resting beneath the blue gossamer sky
Where I may gaze upon clouds of white cotton
Shimmering dragonflies floating on by

Mingling there amongst red satin petals
Yellow and silver, with gold all around
Captured by nature’s soft breathtaking beauty
Gracing the heavens, adorning the ground

There shall I tarry in peaceful devotion
Breathing the fresh and sweet pine-scented air
Feeling the warmth of the sun cast around me
Free from all worry and heartache and care

Come, won’t you join me, to feel all this splendour
There in your mind where such fantasies dwell
Dance with me, sing with me, and then surrender
Each of your cares, and fall under my spell



Song version (Music by John Carter Brown) :

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Submitted: Monday, July 15, 2013
Edited: Saturday, August 10, 2013

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  • Rookie - 24 Points Dee Corpolongo (7/22/2013 9:38:00 AM)

    Your beautiful, descriptive words of such beauty has me drifting there with you.
    I esp. loved your last stanza, being able to let go of all your cares~ if one dares!
    A very beautifully written poem, indeed. You always have what another does need. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 3,790 Points Lyn Paul (7/21/2013 6:15:00 AM)

    Beautiful words in a Field of Green velvet. your writing is always extremely graceful (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Annette Liliann (7/18/2013 3:04:00 PM)

    Breathtaking poem. the description is so vivid that the readers can feel that we are there with you. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 2,309 Points Patricia Grantham (7/17/2013 9:38:00 PM)

    Wow Valerie fields of green Valerie must be a beautiful place
    to lie down. Your use of vivid colors really adds a sense of lightness
    and is very refreshing. I would like to relax like that. Nice. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 9,129 Points Heather Wilkins (7/17/2013 3:15:00 PM)

    the imagery in this poem is beautiful Makes me want to lie down in fields of green velvet. love the write. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,690 Points Valsa George (7/17/2013 11:57:00 AM)

    Fields of green velvet below and a blue gossamer sky above! What a lovely place to rest, free from all worry, heartache and care! Simply lovely! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 11 Points John Brown (7/17/2013 9:32:00 AM)

    I love this one Ruth. It has a very musical feel to it. If you don't mind, could I try setting it to a tune? (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 2,885 Points Hazel Durham (7/17/2013 8:07:00 AM)

    A serene and peaceful write with the comfort and splendour of nature's fields of green velvet!
    So beautiful Val! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 134 Points Danny Draper (7/17/2013 4:33:00 AM)

    A faultless poem and concept, an offering to ponder and accept, peace and serenity painted perfectly. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,505 Points Dinesh Nair (7/16/2013 10:09:00 PM)

    Splendid in lyrical charm and expressive of love unbound.. It is a poem that can be one of the best 10 by you and so I am giving a clean 10 out of 10. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 7,605 Points Sandra Feldman (7/16/2013 6:43:00 PM)

    Well, well, well, Didn't know you were an Enchantress, as well. This poem-painting has fascinated me,
    it's beauty, description, pictorial magic thru words.
    I could even smell the pine- scented air,
    Delightfully travelled, not paying our fare.
    A Gem of a poem, thank you (Report) Reply

  • Rookie King Big Head (7/16/2013 12:36:00 PM)

    Sure Val I will dance with you, how could I not when you have
    written this wonderful poem for me. But with me been so selfish
    and self centered I can not be under no spell. But everybody loves me anyway.

    Your king. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 794 Points Thomas A Robinson (7/15/2013 3:49:00 PM)

    I find it beautiful, Valerie. With a dash of allusiveness to spice it up. It gives the reader the opportunity to engage their imagination and run wild in speculation. Is this a love poem, or a final wish, or perhaps
    something greater than either. We'll let you cast the spell. (Report) Reply

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