Eyes Poem by joshua treece
Eyes
The nights are long and dreamy
They go on and on and I’m not sure
why
The days aren’t long or dreamy
They are cloudy and stress filled
They go so fast and I’m not sure
why
But when I look into your eyes
Everything stops, stops for you
The nights aren’t as long they
Were they are more dreamy when I
Look in to your eyes
The days aren't cloudy and
Not As stressful
The clouds just go away when
I look in to your eyes
Their eyes are the way to someone’s
Heart, life, and their world.
The eyes are the most beautiful
Thing’s in the world and you have the
Best eyes in the world.
In your final stanza you use the word ' eyes' 3 times in 5 lines, as well you use the word ' world' 3 times. It comes across as laziness on the writer’s behalf because it's really uncreative. Please don't take offense, but this piece reads a lot like a Hallmark card, it needs more passion... Always, Amberlee
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4/23/2024 3:35:03 AM # 1.0.0.1119
It is very simple yes. Yes try not to repeat words if you can. I know it is hard sometimes to use other words. I use a thesaurus when I have trouble find other words to use. I did enjoy the idea behid what you are writing. Keep writing.