Unwritten Soul

Ethereal Broken

In my sudden fall
Tried to wake up
Standing with no light
Persona of the darkness delight
Still clouded around my heart
Recall me yesterday ambient night
While I in a fair distance to decide
Heading to lame light in front
Or print my foot backward
Follow the darkness halo
Which direction i should go?

Nightmare revisited
As i seen front not so bright,
I do undo to go and hide
Hiding many scars from being seen
From those eyes that stare
Whenever light strikes on me
So I do undo to go and hide
Conceal my pain to be unseen
And the words that i cant clean

Traces of light in front
Shadowed me at the back
Turning back away from light
As if there is someone i could rely
And i did follow the walk when it moves
Deeper to the road that less light never bright
As i decided not myself to tell but the my dark side
My shadow, follow wherever it goes, wherever it moves

Still clouded in my heart
Is the only darkness with it's charm
My eyes too blind to see without light
Where i found myself drown in black tears
Swimming to somewhere discovering destiny
Where nowhere to go, aimless in estranged sea
Lost in a dreamless sea, be crowned me as an angel
The broken angel that rise from black stained heart
New heart that numb with feelings, and forgotten life meaning

My aching soul
Recalled the past light,
I, I tore my blacken heart away
Dare my ethereal broken to reborn
Free my life by emancipation of my soul
Fly my little soul, with little bright in the dark
To where we were before, when i was waking up
In a distance, between the dark whispers and light source
I shall return and trust on little spark in you again, little bright
Too little to be compared but more than enough to kill the dark
Surrender to you to let light bleaching my stained black heart,
To where we at the point again, and here again to decide
Lead me to there my soul, send me...again

Between the lame light
Or charming darkness wild
Walking to the in front, toward the lame light
Fearless now to show my scars, as it reminds the pains
As reminding the pain, mistakes lesson to learn again
To where i moving now i move toward the lame light
Here, I will decide to where my foot to print it ways
That's how my life to be led in remaining time
With the colors, the beauty i once lost
Spectrum that i denied in the sea
The darkness sea i drown past time

Where my foot to print now on
Trails the marks, left in a new way
By the steps as what my soul says
Stay behind my shadow,
No longer you i will follow
Your shape is always fixed as me
And never me be shaped by you
At the end, it is my very own journey
So let me decide, where my footprints step to

Mistakes will remain as scars
It wont fade and i wont hide
Those eyes can see
Whenever lights revealed on me
If it can be learned by you too
Or telling you i am a survivor
Of life reality tales
My ethereal broken
I chose to follow the light
So my soul, keep my life blue
Oh God, I know you lead me, so true

Submitted: Tuesday, June 11, 2013
Edited: Wednesday, July 31, 2013

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Poet's Notes about The Poem

The poem maybe not be a good interest for you to read,
long and boring..dont say i didnt warn you that hahaha
It was derived from my old style, still it sounds me, Unwritten Soul
The idea of this poem came a year ago but i never completed it until now. So many missing points were gone within in mean time before it got written...what i imagine in this work was

' we at the point between very dark place and a lame spotlight place..
and someone has decided to turn way from the light to hide the scars
but then going to far to be in the dark until he/she cannot see what is he/she heading to until drown in a place, a darkness place, and no place to go just aimless and everywhere is nothing but dark...so he/she breaks the heart and emancipate the soul, that still have light a little to back to the place where he/she decided at first place...as the person follow the shadow of himself/herself to lost in the dark this time this person use his/her soul and mind to control life
and dare to face everything, as with light he/she can see where to go (aim of life) '

in other words, it always not to late to return and fix our broken life as life is always renew in everyday..either we want to redo for better or keep lost in the dark..its us to decide..follow the dark or towards the light_Soul

Comments about this poem (Ethereal Broken by Unwritten Soul )

  • Silver Star - 3,324 Points Patricia Grantham (7/17/2013 9:12:00 PM)

    Darkness can surround us at times and it can cause us to
    lose our way. We may grope for awhile but eventually we will
    take hold to something that will lead us towards the light.
    A nice write Soul. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 71 Points Vipins Puthooran (7/7/2013 12:43:00 PM)

    we're on the right track when we chose to follow the light /
    'tis an excellent poem! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jenie Franksay (6/25/2013 3:48:00 AM)

    woah.... what a poem. masterpiece indeed.
    great work. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 39,733 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (6/19/2013 11:02:00 AM)

    Enjoy and dance there is morning not far look (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 694 Points Shahzia Batool (6/18/2013 10:48:00 AM)

    Mistakes will remain as scars
    It wont fade and i wont hide
    Those eyes can see
    Whenever lights revealed on me

    nice read soul! ...how aesthetically geometrical, and symmetrical you compose...

    yes, towards the light! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,560 Points Dinesh Nair (6/18/2013 9:18:00 AM)

    But it is an intellectual exercise with something to share and I don`t feel it is that boring.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 435 Points Yasmeen Khan (6/18/2013 7:52:00 AM)

    A long epic journey through self ends on faith in light and trust in God and you are the 'survivor of life's reality tales'. I wonder how your pen keeps on going weaving one theme. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,198 Points Ramesh Rai (6/17/2013 10:49:00 PM)

    yes i do agree soul of poetry. beautiful write. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,231 Points Ken E Hall (6/17/2013 4:13:00 AM)

    An epic write as I see it as the years condemn for us all thru the dark the answer lies in your last line... Oh God, I know you lead me, so true and he will and I know you know it...regards (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Nader Baheri (6/17/2013 2:16:00 AM)

    Bad things always happens to us.how we repomd or what would be our respond to them, makes our charachter and the quality of our lives..we can wait under these permanent darkness and carry our wounds and tears with us.we can sit under the heavy perpetual halo of darkness which has immobilized our lives and we can not do anything untill the end of our lives by these losses and the gravity doesnt let us do anything OR we can rise again from these losses and conquer our destiny.we can rise again from our pains and forget our past and scars.and use the scars as a reminder.we can rise again from the best gift we have been gifted and that is LIFE itself.we must invoke during hard times to bury our disappointments.
    now i am writing these words i wonder that is it me that say these words? hahaha
    anyway i love darkness.so do these wonderful poem.(you know i love the one with dark theme) .although i see hope and light or the hope for the hope.and this is itself brightness.
    hosanna that we have ourselves to share our pains and not hide our scars.~nb (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,515 Points Neela Nath (6/14/2013 11:04:00 PM)

    Your agony, dilemma and your conclusion not to yield, to fight back to stay in your brighter soul- - - all are woven skillfully.Love! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,175 Points Valerie Dohren (6/13/2013 1:28:00 PM)

    The darkest hour is just before dawn - emerging from darkness into the light. Great write Soul. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,229 Points Thomas A Robinson (6/13/2013 7:38:00 AM)

    A very complicated poem, yes US.
    You take us from dreams to nightmares and back to daylight wide awake.
    We can choose to hide our faults or turn them to.our advantage. In darkness we hide from seeing
    eyes but only in the sunshine of the day can ee see to.turn.God's creation into a useful tool (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 655 Points Paul Brookes (6/12/2013 3:06:00 AM)

    Without darkness there can be no light, without sorrow no joy but there, like a beacon, is always hope. A lovely poem with great depths 10/10 BB : O) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 208 Points R.j. Wynn (6/11/2013 2:28:00 PM)

    Learn how to dance again can be after we learn to walk again. great balls of fire. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Farah Ilyas (6/11/2013 2:09:00 PM)

    Mistakes will remain as scars
    It wont fade and i wont hide
    Those eyes can see
    Whenever lights revealed on me
    If it can be learned by you too
    Or telling you i am a survivor
    Of life reality tales
    My ethereal broken
    I chose to follow the light
    So my soul, keep my life blue
    Oh God, I know you lead me, so true....yeap God examines us by many trials & tribulations, one who faces these with courage & patience, indeed have a right to called hero, a hero learns through trials & considers God a perfect learner.to think over past time again & again increase ur pain more as u said,
    As reminding the pain, mistakes lesson to learn again..
    its our attitude towards situation that ruins our life, not a situation,
    The broken angel that rise from black stained heart
    New heart that numb with feelings, and forgotten life meaning
    wao...great poem as we have a lot to learn t...u r brilliant soul | Delete this message (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 339 Points David Wood (6/11/2013 1:39:00 PM)

    Lifes rich tapestry takes us sometimes to very dark places and hope enables us to return to the light. The hooe of something better deep in our soul. (Report) Reply

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