Encounter With A Creature Poem by Kim Barney

Kim Barney

Kim Barney

I was born in a bank - - my mother went there and made a deposit

Encounter With A Creature

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Santa Barbara, California.
Summer of nineteen eighty, late July.
The beach was beautiful, sand smooth
and almost white. A perfect day.

Sun, surf, and sand. Swimmers splashing
and frolicking in the gently rolling waves.
Seagulls screaming, seeking some scraps
of something they can eat.

Chest-deep was I in wonderful water,
allowing the waves to lift me up
and carry me for several yards
like just another stick of driftwood.

Feet free from the bottom of the ocean
as the wave picked me up and then
feeling contact as the current
deposits me again.

Suddenly something different happens
when I come back down:
my feet land on something squirmy
instead of touching solid ground.

Some live creature; I could feel it,
though I knew not what it was;
it resented being stepped on
and I knew that just because

of a sudden, sharp pain hits me
right on the top of my left foot;
feels like I've been cut by razor
and I know this can't be good.

Make my way out of the water,
stumble up the beach and then
notice blood that trickles out of
hole the size of fountain pen.

What has happened? Who can tell me?
'Round me gathers group of men.
One says, 'I know; you have managed
to meet a stingray, my friend.'

Hospital was not that helpful;
antidote they had not one.
'Take some Advil, grin and bear it,
for this night will not be fun.'

They were right; it was not pleasant;
leg swelled up to twice its size.
On the morrow I felt better
and it left me much more wise.

Now I know that I should shuffle
feet while walking in the sea,
thus avoiding coming down on
something else that might stab me.

Encounter With A Creature
Monday, October 20, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: animals,life,ocean,pain,swimming
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
True story, as are many of my poems.

20 October 2014
Recife, Pernambuco, Brasil
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Grace Diane Jessen 23 February 2022

Great poem! You captured the experience well. Glad you recovered!

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Daniel Brick 09 February 2017

You mentioned this poem in your comment on my SIX ENCOUNTERS poem. But this is harrowing! All the more so because you present such a lovely day and such a benign time to be in the water. I was there with you until I reached the line about your foot touching something squishy. (That's when I quickly rushed to shore - to get help!) My poem is all metaphor and fantasy. Your poem is the real thing - an encounter with an alien creature we do not understand, but fear, still it is, as D.H.Lawrence said in his poem THE SNAKE, one of the lords of life.

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 10 June 2015

Wow so I searched your poem as u suggested and found it. Hey so is this true? And u stepped on a sting ray ouch! ! ! ! ? ? ? Your flow and rhyme are awesome. I hope there are no sting rays in the shallow beach ah. Kudos.

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Kim Barney 10 June 2015

Yes, it is totally true, as are many of my poems. Thank you for the comment.

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Darwin Henry Beuning 21 October 2014

Kim, I have enjoyed all your poems, you have a wonderful gift and I hope you put many more poems to pen, I fondly remember the many chess wars we have fought over the board.

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Kim Barney 10 June 2015

Thanks, Hank. You are the one who got me started writing again by telling me about Poem Hunter. As far as chess goes, I have no one to play with here. (See my poem LOSING THE TOUCH.)

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