(e) 3 (Dark) The Dark Night Poem by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean

(e) 3 (Dark) The Dark Night

Rating: 5.0


Why is tonight such a dark night
What is it trying to hide?
Sweeping a dark velvet shroud shutting all light
Invoking the restful spirits to rise

Rise, rise, slowly they rise
Mortals like us standing in a hush
The shaman suddenly lets out a cry
His chants gone awry in a sudden rush

They swoop, they circle, they speak without words
A sudden breeze blows, an icy shudder flows
The owl lets out a shriek, so do other birds
The demons in the mortals sneak out in rows

The wolves come out from the men
To join the dance of its hosts
Circling over the body of the shaman
Being feasted by the ghosts

The men stand rooted in a respectful trance
The moon slides in to watch casting its silvery light
To see this orgy of the dark, to see them all dance
As the fog creeps in and then out, they have floated out of sight

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ashish R 10 October 2006

Its a creepy poem.Good use of words tho.Wonder wht was on ur mind when you wrote this. Ashish.

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Patricia Gale 10 October 2006

Slendid piece, outstanding!

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Preeti - is here! 15 October 2006

This sounds familiar :) its one of my fav. I love the mystery, the fear you've captured in this one. Preets

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Nimal Dunuhinga 12 October 2006

An outstanding write Tranquil. Only in the dark night you may see the white shadows?

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Catastrophe King 11 October 2006

From the whoosh to the wails; the ghosts are wary of those rails that surround and protect this ode shaman lay on its back, as the dark horse rode! .......................................T.O..... keep them coming; we are all loving this erie atmosphere here..... I can see that in the comments you are getting! I really wish you get them published.

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Asma Bahrainwala 10 October 2006

you hv effectively created a dark atmosphere....using gory images... an excellent poem... asma...

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Sridhar RVL 10 October 2006

It is really very Dark. Shaman: is he healing the night, to tranform it in to dawn (a ray of reality) ?

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