Dreamless Poem by Viola Grey

Dreamless

Rating: 4.3


That stake in my heart
were words uttered
from liars lips.
From many lives lived
to one simple demise
inside your mouth.
Heart held firmly in forever,
now broken by
your cold betrayal.
Immortal...no longer,
falling into dreamless,
unwanted sleep.

26/7/08

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kesav Easwaran 26 July 2008

pull away that stake and ignore the pain...the scar will soon fade away...let dreams warm, soon enrich your mortal heart...beautiful write...emotional piercing expressive...ten votes

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Ashraful Musaddeq 21 August 2008

True flavor of love.

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Saint Cynosure 05 August 2008

Viola I have given you yet another 10...

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Who Iam 04 August 2008

May whomever is the reason for this saddness realize he has lost the Best thing in his miserable life! Pick up your shattered heart remove that 'stake' and let the healing process begin! Men can be the most callous of all creatures, Believe in yourself and you will faiir much better.

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Tony Jolley 04 August 2008

Interesting you post 'Dark Dream and 'Dreamless' at the same point, as if neither state comforts you. Reading some of your pieces together is like stitching a patchwork quilt slowly and watching the picture build up. I once said of my daughter when composing music that she seemed to have nothing to interfere between what was in her heart to write and what came out on the keys.... seems you have the same sort of gift. Regards, Tony

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Kris Smith 29 July 2008

Nice write, sad write, all write now rewrite 100 times I am dropp dead gorgous, I love myself and deserve better, theres a good Viola 10 Paris x

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