Dissonance Poem by Sandra Fowler

Dissonance

Rating: 5.0


Childlike, I put my hand before my face.
The moment is too gold, it hurts my eyes.
The gesture of your shadow takes my breath.
I walk as if I moved through heavy cloth.

Geese honk dissonance over old tin roofs.
Sunset is borne away on beating wings.
The sound of my name on your mouth is harsh.
Hands chafe the smoking hour into a flame.

Peviously published, 'World Poets Quarterly', China

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
C. P. Sharma 20 July 2008

Awesome imagery and transferred epithets. The truth is some where in between dissonance and assonance. Innocent ‘hands chafe the smoking hour into a flame’ and the ‘sunset is borne away on beating wings’. The music of life varies between love and hate, either of the two is monotonous and intolerant. The poem exhorts the reader to ruminate. An enchanting poem Sandra. Regards, C. P. Sharma

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Chitra - 20 July 2008

wonderfully done, great metaphors used, and so much conveyed in mere 8 lines

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Rebel Heart 20 July 2008

Rich evocative imagery abounds to reveal a beautiful rekindling of love. The discordant echo of the geese and the harsh calling of your name soon dissipate as 'Hands chafe the smoking hour into a flame.' A wonderfully lyrical write Sandra.

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Uriah Hamilton 20 July 2008

As ever evocative images painting a lonely scene Where human warmth and comfort escape Like your geese over tin roofs. Uriah Hamilton

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John Tiong Chunghoo 22 July 2008

sandra, i love it. Thanks so much for the cd. i had received it.

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Original Unknown Girl 18 November 2008

You say so much in so few words. The ability to do that is a rare thing, I often ramble on when I should just stop, but you have mastered the art so perfectly. I love the geese sounding their dissonance. They are a mighty sight flying off to warmer climes. Wonderful poetry, always here, Sandra. HG: -) xx

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Alison Cassidy 24 September 2008

You share the pain of love with eloquence and artistry in this fine poem. Ironic that a poem titled dissonance should resonate with such harmony. Beautiful as ever, Sandra. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Mamta Agarwal 14 September 2008

the composition- rich in raw emotions, evoked by images that eloquently express the pain. Mamta

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Katherine Wiley 01 August 2008

A beautifull well-written poem with deep emotions. Kate

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Robert Howard 01 August 2008

An artful selection of rough images to reinforce the pain of an unfortunate encounter.

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