Dancing Shadows Poem by Ace Of Black Hearts

Dancing Shadows

Rating: 4.0


A midnight summers dream.
A winters ghost that just won't forget.
The pain that has been both set and laid to rest.

Abandon what you think you know.
For all exits aren't as apparent.

Beyond the obvious.
Sight limited by distance, light, and color.
Emotions hieghten, as the heart beat rattles on faster and faster.

A fear that is never welcome.
A Whistling coming from that unknown rooftop.
Echo's so feint, maybe it just doesn't bare needing to be repeated.
Tears frozen solid, and shattered reflecting this erie light.
Speaking in so many languages it is hard to keep up.

Mind boggling, mind blowing is the set circumstances and event we constantly find ourselves in.
When focus is needed does the backround noise just disappears.
Or does it reach the inner ear?

Slowly it's seeping in corrupting our truest intention.
All words are nothing more then a reinvention.
With thoughts we would rather not mention.

And in this circus of a deluge, which are the ones we find most useful.

The crime of a cryptic verse?
Is it the theft of some old ladies purse?
Minipulated or rehearsed?
The gears set in reverse.
A god given purpose.

A ring of the almighty.
Look at that it's the splendor of aphrodite.
A fabolous pose in prose I suppose.
Forgive me for getting so giddy.
But this is the nature of my undaunting laughter.

Faith amoung and for the blind.
Shadows that both dance and intertwine.
In the end there is something we must all find.
Bet yours isn't the same as mine.
Days shall never be wasted for me by counting the unending number of times.

Thursday, April 16, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: peace
COMMENTS OF THE POEM

An effervescent display of imagescaping, Ace...I like the employment of the variable or spot rhyming...You know, Just an IMO, if you don't mind...After reading this gem twice, I think the piece might present even better if it were restructured by implementing stanzaec structure, such as perhaps 5 cinquain stanzas...25 lines in total...No need to change any text...IT is fine as is...Consider having the final lines of each stanza rhyme....And again, that's just this amateurs IMO...Either way...I like what you did here... ~FjR~

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