Treasure Island

Lawrence S. Pertillar

(February/'47 / Connecticut, USA)

Critique 'This' If It's Wished


Critique 'this' if it's wished.
Decisions to be made with a decisiveness,
And done to respond to end conflicts...
Aren't embraced by the ones,
Familiar with offering their opinions...
From the comfort of sitting on a fence.
Especially it they are not motivated to participate,
By a funding provided to convince them...
The time they give to 'volunteer',
Will be covered by a payment for their involvement.
To diminish their unsolicited criticisms made,
Heard each time those not getting paid for 'their' time...
Suggest those living within the area of debris,
Should at least express their concerns and with dignity...
With a doing of it with action.
And not with the flapping of their lips.
Critique 'this' if it's wished.

'What? '

The only reason you are involved,
Is not from a duty felt with a feeling of responsibility.
But that you are actually getting paid,
For the time you volunteer.
Critique 'this' if it's wished.

'But that is no reason why others shouldn't be here.'

Would you be?
If the pay you received had not been offered to you,
To please your needs.
But to others who are hired to inspire.
And with a doing of visible deeds.
Critique 'this' if it's wished.

'I don't live in this community.'

Exactly.
And those who do are not getting paid,
To be reminded how lazy others are.
To 'then' become offended,
By a lack of expressed concern...
As others pocket a few dollars,
To spend and leave with nothing left learned.

Critique this if it's wished.
Would you be here without pay?
Critique this if it's wished.
Would you volunteer your time everyday,
To hear people say what you do or don't do?

Critique this if it's wished.
Would you be here without pay?
Critique this if it's wished.
Would you volunteer your time everyday,
To hear people say what you do or don't do?
As if they were diseased by elitist deeds.

Critique this if it's wished.
Would you be here without pay?
Critique this if it's wished.
Would you volunteer your time everyday,
To hear people say what you do or don't do?
And they are getting paid,
To do it too?

Critique this if it's wished.
Would you be here without pay?
Critique this if it's wished.
Would you volunteer your time everyday,
To hear people say what you do or don't do?
As if they were diseased by elitist deeds.

Critique this if it's wished...
Would you be doing what you do,
If the doing what you did was done...
Without pay to enjoy some fun.

Critique 'this' if it's wished.

I'm here with my opened ears.

Critique 'this' if it's wished.

I'm here with open ears.

Critique 'this' if it's wished.

I'm here with my opened ears.

Critique 'this' if it's wished.
Critique 'this' if it's wished.

Submitted: Saturday, April 06, 2013
Edited: Thursday, October 10, 2013

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