kanav justa

Veteran Poet - 1,092 Points (Shimla)

Constant Sorrow - Poem by kanav justa

A Sunday

Tranquil I stay
Alone in my way
nothing to play
nothing to say

hairs getting gray
sadness they spray
and depressed i lay
Still without a pay

And all i pray
someone take me away

to a place where there are lots of flies at least I can spend my time killing them

Comments about Constant Sorrow by kanav justa

  • Veteran Poet - 1,738 Points Dinesh Nair (4/20/2014 2:02:00 AM)

    You could retain the element of suspense all throughout and your handling of the phases of the illustrative poem is superb Kanav. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 19,389 Points Amitava Sur (1/20/2014 2:54:00 AM)

    That's why I repeatedly say - Loneliness in a way is another form of death...... right penning Kanav (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,961 Points Valsa George (12/15/2013 12:57:00 AM)

    Beautifully rhyming verse on a blighted life! Enjoyed the easy flow of the whole poem! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 10 Points Morose Mermaid (11/27/2013 12:08:00 AM)

    Like most of it... except the ending.... Love the title... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 37,059 Points * Sunprincess * (11/8/2013 5:57:00 PM)

    the ending is astounding and still it makes me laugh; p (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,767 Points Patricia Grantham (6/5/2013 9:25:00 PM)

    A delightful poem. Killing flies is just another way
    of killing some time. Hope the sorrows will fly away (excuse
    the pun) . Enjoyed the write. Please read my poem
    Valley of Despair (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 37,059 Points * Sunprincess * (12/31/2012 9:12:00 PM)

    the ending gave me a laugh.. fabulous (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Stevie Taite (12/24/2012 2:46:00 AM)

    This is an awesome little muse! Reads so well and I love the last line! It's a real 'kick the can' with your pockets tugged down poem! Enjoyed! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Stevie Taite (12/24/2012 2:45:00 AM)

    This is an awesome little muse! Reads so well and I love the last line! It's a real 'kick the can' with your pockets tugged down poem! Enjoyed! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,521 Points Unwritten Soul (12/16/2012 8:54:00 AM)

    SO short but it conclude all perfectly....that's how a good poem can share! Nice nice nice write Kanav...it really good, very good..and so true heartfelt_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 96 Points Jahan Zeb (12/16/2012 8:38:00 AM)

    You kept me guessing what the end will be like. there you go my dear. the last line is an extremely unexpected end. Very nice and very imaginative. You know your last line is very powerful. yes it's comic but means a lot and makes the readers thinking. What distress! if someone finds killing flies better than.
    10 out of 10 dear (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 187 Points Owain Glyn (12/13/2012 2:44:00 PM)

    I have just got to tell you, there are very few pieces that I read that have made me laugh out loud, yours most certainly did! Not really fair to take it out on the poor flies! ha, ha, ha. I shall definitely read some more. Worth a 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie So Close (12/13/2012 9:29:00 AM)

    the ending was so amazing.....keep on poeting...

    »so close« (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Herojit Philem (12/13/2012 3:42:00 AM)

    There is kick in heart at the end of the poem...! ! ! ! Nice...! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 13, 2012

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