trinity aana

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Commit...., , , , , To, , , , , , .......Yourself - Poem by trinity aana

i wish you to have a life commited to yourself
me mine i all is engulfed in you.........commit
rounded off to a millionth number
memorize snuggling shimmering
reverend review exulted name
we as in you and you, us as in me and me
pay homage to this very light illuminating
me evasive mine diligent your corelation.........commit
gifted to us catched by us hidden from us
name number collaborating imbibing in we
it all one day erupted
it all same day immersed
that day will it all synchronize? ?
my life your life cosmos these
milkyway this milkyway.that..........we commit committed us
i wish you wish a life commited to myself, , , , , yourself, , , , , , commit! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !


Comments about Commit...., , , , , To, , , , , , .......Yourself by trinity aana

  • Rookie - 237 Points Kesav Easwaran (10/25/2008 2:29:00 AM)

    good commitment to your imagination...but, not that much to your language... (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 12 Points premji premji (7/29/2008 6:14:00 AM)

    one who is committed
    cannot be a poet! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (5/24/2008 7:52:00 AM)

    yeahhh trinity im commited to read your works.it's great man, just great. take care. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chandan Roy (2/5/2007 9:13:00 AM)

    This is what MAY be called creative writing! It is a GREAT read. The theme is well woven with mastery on words. Keep it up.... you did well. An ordinary poet would have got deviated from the theme by the end - but you did well. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,127 Points Kee Thampi (1/14/2007 10:43:00 PM)

    my life your life cosmos these
    milkyway this milkyway.that..........we commit committed us
    i wish you wish a life commited to myself, , , , , yourself, ,
    the great philosophy of real mind with milkystars (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, January 1, 2007

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 18, 2010


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