Coming To America Poem by Icy rivas

Coming To America

Rating: 5.0


Once upon a time
when we didnt have a dime
when we lived on the streets
when it was hard to get back on our feet
when there was no hope
I had to go on a boat
when it was hard to stay together
and I didnt want to fly
but I still had to say 'good-bye'
its hard to say bye
its like trying to catch a fly
here I am.
in this foeign land
with no one I knew
one but lou
I couldnt say the words
no one understands me
no one but the birds
so one day I am going back
to breath its fresh air
of the outer back

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ayesha Sartawi 30 November 2008

hello, i think you have much improved since the previous poems i have read and i quite enjoyed reading this one, but i need you to focus more on your spelling mistakes try writing your poems on microsoft word first then copying them here, because i am trying to do the same with my poems.... take care and good luck

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Hugo Sanchez 15 November 2008

muy lindo.i love your poem, keep writing...i give you a 10

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