Jim Hiner


Clothespins - Poem by Jim Hiner

Clothespins
Mama had a worn out cloth bag
Hanging out on the line.
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Poet's Notes about The Poem

By Jim Hiner about his Mother with Alzheimer's

Comments about Clothespins by Jim Hiner

  • Bronze Star - 2,036 Points Bernard Snyder (12/11/2013 6:04:00 PM)

    Well-written poem about a very touching matter. Congrats'...Well deserved! (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Ravindra Kumar (12/4/2013 3:56:00 AM)

    Indeed! Thoughtful piece of work. I agree with the psychology of thy mind. Congratulations. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 5 Points Anita Sehgal (11/30/2013 11:00:00 PM)

    so very beautiful and touching.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 39 Points Malini Kadir (11/30/2013 12:54:00 AM)

    I almost lost myself to this disease......and in these lines and poetry... I realize how my family must feel (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 47 Points Rosmin Elsa Mohan (11/27/2013 12:32:00 AM)

    This is just amazing Jim...
    i particularly looove the lines,

    I know we own a debt to our parents,
    But we pay it to our kids.
    It's like being at an auction
    Where no one gets to bid.

    How true!

    Congrats once again! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,686 Points Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black (11/22/2013 10:34:00 AM)

    how sad to watch your Mom wither away with that debilitating disease.At least you have good memories of your childhood.Always have hope for tomorrow's brighter day...lovely poem and congratulations on your win.. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,921 Points Babatunde Aremu (11/14/2013 2:50:00 AM)

    This is a wonderful poem. It gives detail experience of a mother- child relationship. Very emotional (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 2 Points Luna Tsuki (11/9/2013 4:20:00 AM)

    A heartbreaking story sewed into a beautiful poem. Congratulations on your win. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 72 Points Alexander Coppedge (11/5/2013 11:13:00 AM)

    A lovely story. Well expressed. Loved how you close this art. Simply wonderful. Very creative. Thank you. And congratulations. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,993 Points Ken E Hall (11/4/2013 2:24:00 AM)

    such a beauty a story we all live a sure fire winner for originality how you set the poem day by day regards (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,442 Points Kavya . (11/4/2013 12:52:00 AM)

    amazing poem Jim....................so true that we always owe to our parents, but we pay it our kids.............its hard for us to be there with them throughout, but they were always there for us...............Lifes a game, which each one of us play, things like this are beyond our control, which we have to pay.

    ALSO HEARTY CONGRATULATIONS TO YOU FOR BEING A RUNNER UP IN THE PH CONTEST. This poem deserves a superior place. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,091 Points Patricia Grantham (11/2/2013 6:09:00 PM)

    Truly a phenomenal write using clothespin as the center of the story
    yet telling a compelling story about this dreadful disease that robbed
    your mother mentally and physically. Took a lot of courage to tell it I am sure.
    Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved. The best always. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 115 Points Mehri Mehraban (11/1/2013 9:34:00 AM)

    an amazing poem you composed.
    It reminds me the novel In Search of Lost Time written by Marcel Proust.
    The role of memory is central to the novel and your poem. A great idea and a great
    Result. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Sj Holland (11/1/2013 8:29:00 AM)

    Enjoyed reading this poignant poem, to which most of us can relate.. Congrats on your win! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,514 Points Hans Vr (10/31/2013 9:12:00 PM)

    Congrats Jim, that is a wonderful poem.
    I truly recognise the helplessness we all went through (my father succumbed of it recently)
    The best we can do perhaps is accept and be there anyhow as often as we can
    And yet it is so tough... it is such a horrible disease! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 837 Points Krishnakumar Chandrasekar Nair (10/31/2013 3:51:00 AM)

    Our debts to parents will always be unpaid
    Too little time left before we realize its too late
    So now in this moment hug them before they are laid
    In some quiet place deep down according to their fate....

    Very touching poem with several beautiful intense lines and this poem should have been first. Welcome all ye poets to my page too. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,515 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (10/30/2013 11:29:00 PM)

    Such a wonderful poem...reminds me of my own mother... (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 543 Points Yasmeen Khan (10/30/2013 11:00:00 AM)

    Congrtats on winning. I've read first time this poem and am greatly inspired by it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 65 Points Rusty Gibson (10/28/2013 8:29:00 AM)

    The best doesn't always win. This is incredible story. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,377 Points Khairul Ahsan (10/27/2013 10:05:00 PM)

    This is a wonderful poem that touches every heart that reads it. I gave it an 'excellent' while voting.
    Jim, with only one poem posted to this forum, you are almost on the top. Do you know your potentials? Please keep writing... you have many more laurels to earn.
    Congratulations on winning the honors, and congratulations on writing a masterpiece that will please many more readers in the days ahead. (Report) Reply










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