saadat tahir

Freshman - 930 Points (21011965 / Islamabad-Pakistan)

Chains Of Care … 0406-2k13


bring ye one bring them all
bring them in bundles and also
on trailers extra large

dangling guns and turrets ripped
chain tracks wrecked, and also
those that have egos sipped

tin stars arrayed and crowns in them
gleaming showcase perks and also
roots the branches and the stem

Arrows and spears that skewered hearts
Darts the carts, major haul, and also
missiles guns and their component parts

Melt and beat into chains of care
break and split and crack and also
mould to bells and farmer’s ploughshare


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04th Jun,2k13
Islamabad.

Submitted: Monday, June 03, 2013
Edited: Friday, August 02, 2013

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give peace a chance....

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  • Rookie - 267 Points David Wood (6/11/2013 5:36:00 AM)

    They say war is an extension of politics, there must be a lot of bad politicians. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 2 Points Lasoaphia Quxazs (6/9/2013 4:06:00 PM)

    I know what you mean, because I went through a war and a revolution with the dead bodies, starvation, but I got out of it. It is possible to find peace in our soul if we are patient enough and keep our mind on these, not on the problem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 415 Points Yasmeen Khan (6/8/2013 1:29:00 PM)

    We are a war-weary nation, weary of bangs and bombs. Dove of peace has become a bird of myths for us. In such a situation a poet with vision and feet firmly stepped on the ground cannot help making it the subject of his poetry. Saadat Tahir is a contemporary poet who has deep love for his country and feels sorrow for the plight of his nation. He expresses it in powerful images like: ‘trailers extra large’ and ‘dangling guns’. They form a familiar picture in my mind i.e.‘trafficking of arms’. I love the message of the poem-we have to say farewell to arms and embrace peace. The clanking of chains must change into chime of bells and guns’ barrels melted into ploughshare.
    Structurally this poem is a little different from many of Saadat’s poems. Instead of end-stopped lines poetry of run-on lines in which each line logically and grammatically carries over into the next line called enjambment (Shazia Batool can better explain it) Rhymes within the lines ‘hearts/darts and carts’ give it a smooth flow, a lyrical quality. The repetition of ‘and also’ in the second line of each triplet gives strength to the theme. The whole poem is crafted well and this is my humble effort to understand it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Farah Ilyas (6/6/2013 10:02:00 AM)

    Melt and beat into chains of care
    break and split and crack and also
    mould to bells and farmer’s ploughshare....a chain in which each word embedded to other with care :) .....great (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Julie Schleppegrell (6/6/2013 7:54:00 AM)

    Hello Saadat. Very nice poem. :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,668 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (6/5/2013 8:30:00 AM)

    mould to bells and farmer’s ploughshare
    Beautiful message of peace. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,060 Points Unwritten Soul (6/5/2013 7:55:00 AM)

    You chain the words beautifully, a chain of care yet words cared in chain again...what a chain, just wonderful one_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,675 Points Wahab Abdul (6/4/2013 11:44:00 PM)

    you use the language as it is your mother tongue..and i see a clear image you create here with sweet words.. lovely and extra fine.....10 (Report) Reply

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