Candle's Love..... Poem by Sebastine Humaemo

Candle's Love.....

Rating: 5.0


It was a pleasant rainy day
and darkness covered all the way
tender fingers searched my place
and pretty nails brushed all over my face
I felt someone holding me close and tight
which made me feel more secure and light

when I got my head twisted and lighted up
my brightness raised slowly filling the room
that minute I was given birth and bloomed
opening my eyes I saw the same pretty face
thought to myself I should express my love
atleast today, without letting this chance go waste

the more I saw, pearl like drops of sweat, running down her neck
I burnt myself more to brighten up in admiring her
when her fingers started playing on my burning flame bud
I felt the passion of love mixed with heat, first time deep in my thread
whenever I move my bright flame head in love, towards her side
her warm breadth pushed me away as if saying, naughty just move aside

I ask God, to make me a man atleast few minutes for now
so that I can express her, my everlasting love
sudden brightness filled the room making me, go dim
and cool air from above, made me thin and unsteady, as if am struggling without a limb
with pain I burnt myself more to keep me alive
tears ran all over ma body, as I felt am soon gonna die

for the last time I saw her face getting much close towards me
I had no words to speak, when I felt her lips just a few inches from me
thought my dreams gonna come true, cos I saw brightness in her eyes
and I thanked God for the miracle which gonna happen cos of my cries
her lips parted gently as if sweet words of love gonna flow
pitty I am..she ended my life with the air her lips blowed

as a line of smoke, I departed watching her with no words to say
with tears...thinking myself..am not a human to be loved
am just a candle....

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Reshma Ramesh 12 December 2008

beautiful dude.......................lovely ending....well penned

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Anjali Sinha 12 December 2008

lovely-- like a candle fleeting love -10 anju

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Sundos Mohammad 13 December 2008

u are great! ! ! ! no more...! ! !

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*Trusting You* 13 December 2008

this is AMAZING! I love it! ! it is the best thing I have read like this in a long time! ! ! very good job. really a neat piece. the part about her lips is really cool. I ask God, to make me a man atleast few minutes for now so that i can express her, my everlasting love good lines Becca

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brittany 15 December 2008

good job with this one sebastine..... stay busy with your writing! ! !

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Rachel Butler 21 September 2009

her lips parted gently as if sweet words of love gonna flow pitty I am..she ended my life with the air her lips blowed Rachel Ann Butler

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rago rago 15 May 2009

well crafted words and from the heart you have fulfiled the poem......a poem must stimulate a reader......you have done it.......which stimulates me to think of caldle`s love.....next time plz ask her to stay........see my 10 +++

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Naidz Ladia 07 February 2009

my gosh, , , my commnt s blocked again.....whew.......whatta naughty ph.....bleeeeeee...bleeeeeee

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Ency Bearis 05 February 2009

well written simile poem..life is like a lighted candle..give warm to others and serve as a light to others..and simply the concept well narrated...

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Miriam Maia Padua 05 February 2009

great, meaningful write... really has a great message in it our life is just like the life of a candle...a burning candle our life relies on Him..to lenghten our life or blow it off and we can serve as light to everybody.... i love this piece....great reminder....10++++

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