Noreen Carden

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Bye Bye Baby - Poem by Noreen Carden

With head bent low he watches her go,
bravely facing a world she does not know
He smiles goodbye and covers up his tears
for he must be brave if she looks back in fear.
Every fiber of his being wants to run and gather her
close to his heart but he makes his feet firm on the ground
all smiles as she turns round.
The first of many firsts for her and
he knows the pain of each step will remain.
Her first day of school is her first step away from
the safe harbour of a father's love

Comments about Bye Bye Baby by Noreen Carden

  • Veteran Poet - 2,578 Points Achill Lad (9/28/2014 3:20:00 PM)

    I remember this experience with my own. It was heartwrenching for parent and child. Memories again flooding back. Beautiful writing. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 12,196 Points Khairul Ahsan (5/22/2014 7:43:00 PM)

    @Daniel Brick,
    Nice comments, thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 20,460 Points Daniel Brick (5/16/2014 9:01:00 AM)

    Like the other readers who have left comments before me, I can relate to this scene as a father. The last two lines mean a lot to me, because it's about the reality of being a parent: at some point in time, when you are not ready for it, you will have to let go of your son/daughter. That's the truth of parenthood. The title BYE BYE BABY should have prepared me this ending, but, no, just as in real life, I was unprepared for it. There is consolation in the fact that these small lettings-go and later the big lettings-go change our relationship to a child to an adult relationship and that can last for decades of warmth and sharing. But the special joy of caring for that dependent child for whom you are the center of the world - your poem predicts it, that's transient. And so it's time to shift to celebrating their graduations, their successes in the world, their independence. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,523 Points Marie Shine (2/12/2014 1:21:00 PM)

    Oh! I love this very emotional write, which caressed my heart and touched my spirit, Noreen. What a poignant picture of a daughter's first day at school and you have captured it so poetically! Excellent use of imagery which paints the sadness experienced by the father in parting with his beloved daughter and even though it's for a few hours only to begin with, until he sees her again, they will be the longest few hours in his life. This first day will be the first of many first days in the years to come. A very finely crafted write, Noreen. Thank you for sharing. I so enjoyed reading. Blessings, with Light & Love... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 19,005 Points Amitava Sur (1/3/2014 9:32:00 PM)

    A lovely picture of a father's emotion is drawn along with love and commitment to his baby.... loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 918 Points Mike Barrett (12/10/2013 2:42:00 PM)

    A touching moment well captured! Every father will be able to relate to this. Not father's in last line? Well done! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 918 Points Mike Barrett (12/10/2013 2:36:00 PM)

    Touching....all fathers can relate to the to the moment you've captured here. You might want to execute and add the missing apostrophe in father's. Thanks for you input on Drift Up and A realization revisited. Much appreciated. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,196 Points Khairul Ahsan (11/6/2013 7:59:00 PM)

    'The first of many firsts for her and
    he knows the pain of each step will remain.
    Her first day of school is her first step away from
    the safe harbour of a father s love
    Usually a mother's love is conspicuous, father's is not. Thanks to the poet for seeing her father's love and appreciating it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,196 Points Khairul Ahsan (11/6/2013 7:21:00 PM)

    Great comments from everyone, on a very touchy poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,404 Points Valsa George (11/4/2013 10:23:00 PM)

    A poem reflecting the feelings of a loving father who waves goodbye to his daughter on her first day to school and who knows that....
    ' Her first day of school is her first step away from
    the safe harbour of a father s love'

    Very poignantly expressed! Enjoyed much! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,070 Points Bri Edwards (10/11/2013 1:37:00 PM)

    he knows the pain of each step will remain. is it his pain which pains him? come on dad! grow up! ! and go back to doing the dishes and vacuuming. i guess my mom was ready and willing to send her fourth one off; or maybe i just didn't look back and notice her tears. i was anxious to get to school and check out all the babes.

    thanks for sharing with us noreen. and thanks for the rhyming and not feeling you needed a rhyme with every line. sometimes i find a poet trying for a rhyme when it just doesn't work for me and i'd rather that they not try.
    the first day of school! what an adventure each of us started then. :) i have a bye bye poem also....BUT it is MUCH different. it might cause a tear or two in animal-loving fanatics. : (

    36 Bye-bye Jimmy.....[Nature observations; Death; Personal] online 10/29/2012 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,737 Points Patricia Grantham (9/14/2013 9:11:00 AM)

    This is a beautiful poem Noreen. I can relate to this write
    personally. I remember my first day of school when I hated
    to leave my mother. I imagine it was as hard for her as It
    was for me. She had to cut those apron strings and let the
    baby chick leave its nest. A women of strength she was. An
    inspiring write this is. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 397 Points John Brown (9/11/2013 8:49:00 AM)

    A lovely poem. I remember well having to take my first son to pre-school. It was heartbreaking to see his little sobbing face as I left him there. I'm welling up now. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,298 Points Robinson (9/10/2013 2:17:00 PM)

    I agree with everyone else it is a beautiful poem. not much to say about it just alot to read about it over and over. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,262 Points Geetha Jayakumar (9/4/2013 9:52:00 AM)

    A beautiful write on babies..Loved reading it. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,115 Points Dave Walker (9/4/2013 6:43:00 AM)

    A great poem, I went through this with my daughter, it really
    is hard, but it makes you feel so proud at the same time. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,120 Points Heather Wilkins (9/2/2013 6:58:00 PM)

    a beautiful write our babies must all leave the safe harbor of home adjust to the world. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,433 Points Saadat Tahir (9/2/2013 9:20:00 AM)

    so charming and loaded with love and care....

    very well written

    liked (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,196 Points Khairul Ahsan (9/2/2013 3:33:00 AM)

    An excellent poem that will touch the heart of every father.
    Her first day of school is her first step away from
    the safe harbour of a father s love
    A heartfelt observation, liked it. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, September 1, 2013

Poem Edited: Wednesday, December 11, 2013

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