Broken Poem by Joan Hart

Broken

Rating: 4.7


I wish you had broken me,
A nice, clean break
A cut deep but final
With no lingering ache

Instead of being careful
And thinking things through
I wish I’d been careless -
I wish I’d had you.

I was protecting myself,
I knew you’d hurt me
But this pain I feel now
Is one I didn’t foresee

This vacancy inside me
Serves as a token
Yes, instead of empty
I wish I was broken

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Carl Harris 10 February 2009

I really liked your phrasing in this terse and well expressed poem, Caroline. It was quite exceptional compared to the usual poem of unrequited love and it was clearly well thought out ahead of time, not just written on the spur of the moment of inspiration like so many poems I see are. You have a keen poetic talent and it showed very well in this fine poem. Carl.

0 0 Reply
Fidel Arcenas 08 February 2009

A very poignant piece that reminds us how painful it is to part with someone you truly care for. But life is like that. It has always a way of putting you back on track with someone who truly deserves you. Keepl writing.

0 0 Reply
READ THIS POEM IN OTHER LANGUAGES
Close
Error Success