Breathless Poem by Monica Rose

Breathless

Rating: 4.8


One, Two, Three.
I close my eyes.
I let time pass by
Too scared to move
Too scared to breath
My heart is pounding
My heart is slipping.
Footsteps coming
People wangling
Glasses crashing
Knocks on my door
I stay silent
The knocks get louder
The door opens
With a loud crack
Smoke fills the room
Everything gets blurred
Muffled voices are near
I still don't say a word
If I do
I will see you soon
Slowly loosing my breath
Now I am breathless.
Breathless without you.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Karina The Cat 15 December 2009

I Like This One -Karina

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Amber Muth 21 November 2009

i really enjoyed this poem of yours especially with the mystery and loving emotion and much detailed made a strong poem that got my attention. Good job Monica :) -Amber

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good piece.. i enjoyed it.. a bunch.

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Deborah Cromer 07 November 2009

Interesting to read. Mystery and emotion combined to create an intense piece of work. Good description and nice choice of words. Good job on this! Debbie

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Allan O 07 November 2009

very nice Monica..I enjoyed reading this...thanks ~^..^

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