Breaking Up Poem by louis rams

Breaking Up

Rating: 5.0


breaking up is so very hard to do
especially when it's me and you
we have tried to keep our love alive
but! apparantly it has died.

love and respect go hand in hand
and that is something you don't understand
if respect you had given me
this love would have lasted eternally.

when we first got together
life seemed so much better
then with time you started to change
and with any problem-i was to blame.

i tried to give you the world
and into our life came a little girl
with this little girl i thought that things would get better
instead you became a control fanatic
and any little word it became static.

i know that everything in life is two sided
right-wrong-up-down-so i listened to your complaints
about everything including me
and i made changes drastically.

but the changes were to no avail
for you did not see that you still tried to control me
and everyone around.
and if they did'nt agree you'd put them to the ground

love is not who is in control
love grows from the inner soul
and if this did not happen to you
that your knees are weak, your heart skips a beat
and everything in life seems happy and gay
and your mind starts to stray.

then i think that what it is-is that i never entered your heart
deep enough to make those feelings rise
instead you chose to live a lie
so with this we must part
in hopes that we'll both find a new start.

this is the part of breaking up that we must bear
this is the part of breaking up that we both share

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COMMENTS OF THE POEM

breaking up is so very hard to do especially when it's me and you we have tried to keep our love alive but! apparantly it has died.... it is heart breaking and very painful dear.. not to happen with anybody....10

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a very moving poem...what an emotional hit this gives...this breaking up

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Amanda Seltrecht 23 December 2008

I love this poem it reminded me of how my relationship ended and there was nothing that I could do.He told me that he didn't love me anymore and it was really hard. So I found that poetry was the only things that helped me through it all. Knowing that I wasn't the only one who was going through a hard time. So keep on writing your great at it and I'll continue to read your poems.

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I think this is one of the best poems you have written so far Louis..I hate this feeling too leaves you so alone.. But you wrote this very very well.. Krista

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Vaibhav Pandey 17 December 2008

You put your heart and soul writing this poem. i loved every bit of it. well done, sir 10+++

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