Boys Boys Poem by Tessa Monaghan

Boys Boys



These days
I'm so lost
In this fog
This isn’t my last
Time
Of being caught up
This isn’t my last
Time
Fighting for love
I’m so lost
In this fog
Of boys

Boys boys
There my pain
Boys boys
There my smiles
Boys boys
There my guards
Boys boys
There my fog

It’s the boys
That keeps me in this haze
It’s the boys
That causes all our pain
There here
And their there
There everywhere
There everywhere
It’s the boys
That we can blame

Why do boys
Have to hurt us
The way they do
Why do they
Have to all attack
At once
Its they army of boys
The army of toys
There our
Boy toys
Boy toys
Army boys

Boys boys
There my pain
Boys boys
There my smiles
Boys boys
There my guards
Boys boys
There my fog

It’s the boys
That keeps me in this haze
It’s the boys
That causes all our pain
There here
And their there
There everywhere
There everywhere
It’s the boys
That we can blame

These days
I’ve been so lost
It’s always a maze
And so much it coast
To get out of it
Then you’re right back in
Again
I’m caught up
I’m caught up
In this
Fight for love

I’m lost
In this maze
This maze
And fog
Of boys
I’m chocked up
I’m caught up
Oh what do I do
What do I do
To get out

Boys boys
There my pain
Boys boys
There my smiles
Boys boys
There my guards
Boys boys
There my fog

It’s the boys
That keeps me in this haze
It’s the boys
That causes all our pain
There here
And their there
There everywhere
There everywhere
It’s the boys
That we can blame

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
William Boly 17 April 2009

While this piece of literature is certainly compelling, and I'm excited that you choose to write in your free time, there are a number of grammatical errors that hinder its effectiveness. Your use of 'There, ' 'Their, ' and 'They're, ' are completely incorrect. Their: 'They consumed their brownies' (Posessive) There: 'They went to a small bakery over there.' (Directional) They're: 'They're my fog.' (Contraction 'They are') I hope you'll find this helpful. If not, we'll have to seriously reconsider your grade in my class. -Mr. Boly

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Chantel Weston 22 January 2009

babe why do we put so much time and energy in to these boy? haha. you know that they are a wast of time! ! hahaha! but really nice job the haze and maze very complimentery! ~SS CHANTILIE<3

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