louis rams

Gold Star - 5,812 Points (09/13/1943 / new york city)

Bitterness And Hate - Poem by louis rams

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do not let bitterness and hate consume you.
no one knows what your going thru.
no one can see the pain you're in
and what you feel is a crying sin.

the same way that there is bitterness in your heart.
stop! and give love a start.
love can rule all that we go through
it's all up to the inner you.

so look around you at the people who are
consumed with this hate.
make a change before it's too late.


Comments about Bitterness And Hate by louis rams

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/23/2009 7:57:00 AM)


    do not let bitterness and hate consume you.
    no one knows what your going thru.
    no one can see the pain you're in
    and what you feel is a crying sin.... no place in our life a hate n bitterness.. even if u have to hate.. hate self....10

    read mine i am disgrace... never say die and good bye.. go to hell
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  • (5/31/2009 8:24:00 PM)


    Outstanding poem Louis! (Report) Reply

  • (10/30/2008 9:46:00 PM)


    I like the IDEA of this poem moreso than the poem itself. Maybe, it is because I am bothered by the lack of a specific syllabic scheme. Some of the lines are cliche-ish like 'no one knows what you're going though'. The rhyme scheme is off at the end, I guess because there are only three lines. I don't think the last stanza is needed. People don't really like being preached to through poetry. It is obvious about what will happen when you allow bitterness in your heart. I think the strongest line is 'stop! and give love a start' I consider myself a cruel critiquer, so take it as a compliment when I say that I consider this a lyrical poem, like an old country song from the 60's. I don't like many things, but I will give this poem that compliment. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, October 30, 2008



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