Valerie Dohren

Silver Star - 4,225 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Birds Eye View - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Looking down through misty spheres
To visit wondrous lands
Hewn through time, through endless years,
Green fields and golden sands

With glist`ning spreads of sapphire blue
Unfolding `neath my gaze
Then lofty heights of sombre hue
Ascend through misty haze

Beneath the soft and feathered clouds
Rise peaks of emerald green
All topped above with twisting shrouds
Of mist, their tips unseen

And golden plains reach wide and long
Which sparkle in the sun
To then be licked by silv`ry tongues
With threads of silk unspun

Then hov`ring over range and heath
Where roaming creatures dwell
As veils of purple stretch beneath
Enrobing dale and fell

(And yearning, hopeless, specks of dust
Behind confining walls
Beset with envy, greed and lust
Chase dreams in concrete halls)

To fly where beams of gleaming light
On icy rises play
Where fields of pure and dazzling white
Meet deeps of steely grey

And here green curtains hang above
The apex of the world
Dancing as two wrapped in love
With glorious beauty swirled

Then soaring high, beyond, to go
Above all, looking down
At this `blue marble` set below
In her black velvet gown


Comments about Birds Eye View by Valerie Dohren

  • Silver Star - 4,396 Points Ken E Hall (11/7/2014 3:11:00 PM)

    You made me feel like a bird high in the sky viewing all this beautiful planet you are a great story teller thankyou Valerie a gem of a poem...regards (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 95 Points Thomas Vaughan Jones (2/3/2014 1:10:00 PM)

    Flying high Val. The earth seems so much cleaner from a distance. Especially when the story unfolds in impeccable rhyme. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 14 Points Alice -praises-''yhvh'' (6/28/2013 2:24:00 AM)

    What a beautiful mind God has created in you. To be able to put togeather such lovely words to discribe what you see. Marvelous poems. Alice (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points G.R. Gaus (5/14/2013 10:38:00 PM)

    I'm amazed at how your imagination can create these vivid scenes, perfectly portrayed in perfect rhyme, this one is a real beauty...... (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,466 Points Adeline Foster (4/19/2013 2:08:00 PM)

    Had to grin when you mentioned PH tricks. Have seen a few. Thought this one might have an Escher theme. May not be Escher but still a treat to read. An Emily Dickenson Theory is now on my site.
    Adeline (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 916 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (3/3/2013 12:04:00 PM)

    Bird's Eye View provides an excellent view of the surrounding place in wonderful rhyme scheme! Beautiful! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 21,770 Points * Sunprincess * (9/22/2012 1:05:00 PM)

    Wow! I love the view from space you painted for me... :)
    excellent write in these lines
    At this `blue marble` set below
    In her black velvet gown (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Eindaray Kyaw (8/24/2012 11:26:00 AM)

    I like not only the beautiful verses but also the style!
    Pls have a glance to my poem Life Vs Land and advise me!
    Regards! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chris Blazo (8/23/2012 2:07:00 PM)

    A great travel poem with wonderful imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 288 Points John Brown (8/19/2012 7:09:00 AM)

    As already stated, this poem has a musical quality to it. I really enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 30,528 Points Valsa George (7/26/2012 11:19:00 PM)

    Indeed a visual treat...nonpareil! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 75 Points Dawn Ferrett (7/20/2012 3:29:00 PM)

    It's poems like this that inspire me to write! Beautiful! ! ! Dawn x (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 415 Points Captain Cur (6/18/2012 7:26:00 PM)

    One of your best. I thoughly enjoyed the theme,
    the descriptions, the language use and rhyme.
    Masterful handling. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie April Woody (4/13/2012 3:44:00 PM)

    simply amazing, you have a true gift!
    Best of luck.
    -April :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Melissa Carey (4/11/2012 10:31:00 PM)

    LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS! ! ! ! ! ! Just beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kevin Halls (3/29/2012 9:49:00 AM)

    This is not just a poem but a painting as well, as you can picture it in your mind.
    A brilliant piece of work Valerie. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,395 Points Smoky Hoss (3/17/2012 9:33:00 PM)

    You are a very gifted poet, these words cast a spell of wonder... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 484 Points Patti Masterman (3/14/2012 9:24:00 PM)

    There are such lovely lines in here..almost musical, I'd say. (smile) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Karen Deeks (3/11/2012 3:30:00 PM)

    This is exceptional Valerie in description, atmosphere and visual suggestions... Wonderful! ! ! ! l.., . Karen (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,981 Points Walterrean Salley (3/6/2012 7:32:00 PM)

    Outstanding. Imaginatively insightful, Takes you on an incredibly enjoyable journey. A real pleasure to read, Valerie. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 22, 2012

Poem Edited: Thursday, September 20, 2012


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