Betrayal Poem by Young Heart

MY TRANSLATION.. Do you mind..? Un coltello al cuore Un ladro di anime Un giuramento rotto prima che il giorno scemi Un nascosto aggrottare di ciglia Col sorriso avvelenato Ecco il grilletto amichevole che mi ha abbattuto Una notte senza fine Priva di luoghi dove nascondersi Sono sola con il mio grido senza scopo The text above is the Italian version of your poem.. hope you'll be NOT disappointed.. Ciao

please, note: I've taken your gender as female, therefore I've translated: Sono sola con il mio grido senza scopo Should you be a man, it has to be: Sono solo [...]

I agree with Daniel. Nice use of words.

Only at the very end do we get a complete sentence, and it's a bleak view of what has happened with no hope for improvement. But the phrases that make up most of the poem are a list explaining why and it's very convincing. Some of these phrases show a world without trust or truth: a poisoned smile, a friendly trigger, etc. but my favorite is STEALER OF SOULS. That shows how corrupt a world can become. But the very fact a poet has given voice to these thoughts is positive.

thank you guys for ur support :)

I agree with Allotey. Keep writing

Beautifully written. Poetry is a good way to express one's feelings and thoughts. Good work. Stay blessed