S.zaynub Kamoonpuri


Bbb) Sweet Revenge - Poem by S.zaynub Kamoonpuri

An eye for an eye
but mind you to avenge yourself
ain't easy as pie

Indeed a punch for a punch
or invite your foe
for a delicious
malicious lunch
to dish out revenge
and that's a dish best served cold!

But a tooth for a tooth
will it actually soothe?


A horrid scowl for a irked pout
you scream coz she did shout!

Ah that biting desire for sweet revenge
on the mind does it so scavenge!

Sweet it might seem, sweet at first feel
but it's really sour as an orange peel.

Then there's the danger of meting out in excess
There's a need to don self-control's harness.

One would wish to spread retribution evenly
on the slice of his enemy

But to chuck out all plots and thoughts of burning revenge
poses for man at times the greatest challenge.

Is it then so natural for this human brat
to cherish and relish a tit for tat

But if so many of your chores complain of your negligence
you might as well put off too, all wishes for vengeance.

Any wish for poetic justice, sing it in poetry
Harbor no desires for revenge in reality.

Ah alas as Jesus's way to offer another cheek
is for mortal man perhaps a task too meek.


Comments about Bbb) Sweet Revenge by S.zaynub Kamoonpuri

  • Gold Star - 4,883 Points Points Of View (6/17/2015 3:12:00 AM)

    Pen is mightier than sword.
    Any wish for poetic justice sing it in poetry...
    Nice one congratz (Report) Reply

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  • Bronze Star - 2,355 Points Melikhaya Zagagana (12/24/2014 6:06:00 AM)

    Well, i'm not that brave but it is a sublime composure, thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,072 Points Eugene Levich (9/6/2014 11:45:00 AM)

    Lovely poetry- wise, witty, and funny- another tenner. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,405 Points Ken E Hall (3/3/2014 2:10:00 AM)

    A tongue in cheek look at sweet revenge the gentle way...put away the long knives...regards (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Saleem Tharani (2/20/2014 4:19:00 AM)

    But a tooth for a tooth
    will it actually soothe? That strikes the credulity of being human.... surely will serve the purpose, 'and will the swords go back to sheath'. Effective pen! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 152 Points Muhammad Ali (1/1/2014 11:51:00 AM)

    nice poem sister. nice poetic work and peaceful message. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 144 Points Rubab Atwal (10/18/2013 2:44:00 AM)

    wonderfully written..enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 21 Points Gary Kedron (7/3/2013 6:53:00 PM)

    a topic thats been on my mind and tongue lately....
    save it for poetry.... human brat to cherish and relish tit for tat... I have to remember not to be that individual! ! ! ! great read as always.... a pleasure (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,458 Points Unwritten Soul (6/6/2013 12:08:00 PM)

    Sweet it might seem, sweet at first feel
    but it's really sour as an orange peel.

    ...And first read we know it sweet and not sour as orange peel_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,028 Points Sayeed Abubakar (5/31/2013 11:11:00 AM)

    Very good write. Your rhyme-pattern is noteworthy. Go on. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 30,534 Points Valsa George (5/30/2013 5:41:00 AM)

    Fantastic poem! A Great write in music sweet! A sure 10 for this! ! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,149 Points Elena Sandu (5/30/2013 3:24:00 AM)

    This is a wonderful lesson taught a the most gentle way! Loved to read it, thank you! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 953 Points Yasmeen Khan (5/30/2013 1:26:00 AM)

    You have tried to delve deep into the philosophy of revenge. Use of simile like orange peel explains the idea vividly. I can give reference to a well-known song by Luis Enrique Mejia Godoy, the Nicaraguan singer with the title 'Revenge'. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,034 Points Louis Rams (5/25/2013 9:59:00 PM)

    a good write on revenge (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,219 Points Kevin Patrick (5/21/2013 4:16:00 PM)

    Excellent stuff, I love the rhymming and impressed by your wit. I do not relish sermons but this was a splendor (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,279 Points Shahzia Batool (5/21/2013 4:11:00 AM)

    a sweet sermon pleasant to read! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 39,822 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (5/20/2013 10:48:00 AM)

    lovely poem on revenge well penned keep it up (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 39,822 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (5/20/2013 10:48:00 AM)

    lovely poem on revenge well penned keep it up (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,844 Points Wahab Abdul (5/20/2013 10:02:00 AM)

    a well thought out poem and very crafty, love it (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, May 19, 2013

Poem Edited: Thursday, October 3, 2013


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