Persian Nightingale


Autumn's Lips - Poem by Persian Nightingale

Of his toes
Winter stands on the tips
Grazing the treetops
He reads a letter and
Suddenly trips

A spring invitation
In beautiful scented scripts
A message from the ladybird
Who lives among the rose hips

The breeze gives the letter and leaves
As she sees the ice chips
The winter will never come
If you stop kissing
The autumn's lips

(2008/12/11)


Comments about Autumn's Lips by Persian Nightingale

  • Gold Star - 16,075 Points Mandolyn ... (8/6/2014 12:25:00 AM)

    I would lose the in the last line. Just say autumn lips.
    Nice poem. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 372 Points Almedia Knight-Oliver (11/24/2009 1:31:00 PM)

    Great personification 'Autumn's lip'
    Of his toes
    winter stands on the tip
    graging the treetops
    he reads a letter and
    suddenly trips...

    Persian Nightingale, you out did yourself with the poem about autumn...vivid images and a fresh perception.
    A 10, exponentially (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Rachel Ann Butler (9/19/2009 6:36:00 PM)

    In beautiful scented scripts
    A message from the ladybird
    Who lives among the rose hips

    Rachel Ann Butler (Report) Reply

  • Rookie sky dreams (7/28/2009 4:41:00 AM)

    i very much enjoyed this... i absolutely love autumn, i can't wait till august is over so autumn can come.. there's nothing better than new england's fall season... great write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Marla Speece (7/15/2009 10:22:00 PM)

    I love the autumn season. The way the leaves changes colors like our eyes when that certain someone makes us tremble. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Fay Slimm (3/13/2009 4:01:00 PM)

    This is beautiful metaphor woven into and through your clever wording....... first rate and a 10 from Fay..... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Alexander Hale (3/7/2009 11:22:00 PM)

    i like it. i've never read a season poem quite like this one. great write. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points C.R. Clark (12/21/2008 12:12:00 PM)

    Autumn is my favorite time of year. I do like your imagery of kissing autumn's lips. I really enjoyed the poem. Well done, my friend, well done. A 10 from me.
    Richard (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Little Morning Star (12/21/2008 2:59:00 AM)

    autumn is a beautiful days of falling maples
    I like it and I also like your poem..
    great! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie A Poet Who Loves To Sing Alves (12/20/2008 3:53:00 AM)

    Delightfully clever...I appreciate your poetic voice...

    Dorothy C. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 111 Points C. P. Sharma (12/19/2008 1:03:00 AM)

    A highly poetic and exalted autumn. Its sweetness lingers on in my mind.
    CP (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Thad Wilk (12/17/2008 11:08:00 PM)

    A delightful poem, 'great rime an blend', wonderfully depicted this message you send!
    Best wishes Shiraz! *10*! !
    Friend Thad (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ♥ Brie {And Eric} ♥ (12/17/2008 11:56:00 AM)

    I love this one also
    Very beautiful
    Thanks for sharing

    -Brie (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Vinod Kumar (12/16/2008 8:01:00 AM)

    Beautiful lines for the favourite seasons in our hearts, Thanks for sharing the Contemporary important Work,
    With Prays and Regards,
    (Vinod) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sarah Sisson (12/13/2008 7:52:00 AM)

    Very well done...thank you for this one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (12/12/2008 9:31:00 PM)

    good imagery
    kissing autumn's lips
    -10 anju (Report) Reply

  • Rookie M M (12/12/2008 3:00:00 AM)

    Very lovely and charming! 10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 11, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, December 21, 2008


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