Ash Misguided Poem by Moth Harris

Ash Misguided

Rating: 4.9


Wrapped in black
Old, dirty, dusty, damaged
Held inside is something beautiful
A cold vacant stare
Breaks passed the overnight smell
and old particles of hair
Something beautiful is in the shell
Wrapped in an old dirty jacket
I see you when the sun peers over trees
but we can’t see it here

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Well-written, can we see the beauty when its covered by less appealing outer garments? Thank you for posting, L&T

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Raul Castelan 26 June 2007

Symbolic in every way is this piece of yours. What an excellent piece to read.

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Bob Oldfield 17 June 2007

Indeed - a multisensory journey...a mystery...the imagery... I liked this on a first read - great stuff, Moth!

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Chris Mendros 09 June 2007

all the way down to smell on this one, you've hit every sense. The imagery is raw and vivid, and there's something else going on i can't quite place. Great stuff!

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Raul Castelan 09 June 2007

There is some symbolism in this one, and it went with the flow. NICELY DONE! ! !

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