Valsa George


Anticlimax


I lay down to sleep
With the soft whisper of rain in my ears
At some unearthly hour
Wakened up from sleep
By its howls and shrieks
I don’t know when it
Turned into a tumultuous roar
And why I failed to notice
The windows turning on their hinges
And the doors snap open and shut

When I woke up, I saw
The land inundated
Trees, arm twisted
And the leaves still shedding
Drops of tears!

Submitted: Monday, October 07, 2013
Edited: Tuesday, October 08, 2013

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Honouring the request of KEE Thampi to post smaller poems!

Comments about this poem (Anticlimax by Valsa George )

  • Gold Star - 22,211 Points Akhtar Jawad (11/17/2014 1:08:00 AM)

    An stylish description of a rainy night and proceeding neat and clean dawn. A true poetry from a real poetess..........10 (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,237 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (8/28/2014 1:34:00 PM)

    Great imagery.....Valsa....dreams turning into nightmares by the sweet-splashing rain.......very well composed..10/10 (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 6,058 Points Khairul Ahsan (11/26/2013 9:36:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem. An apt title.
    Soft rains turning into tumultuous storms, while the poet is put to sleep by the soft whispers of rain carrying her to a dreamland, and then:
    'The windows turning on their hinges
    And the doors snap open and shut'.

    As the poet wakes up, she sees,
    'The land inundated
    Trees, arm twisted
    And the leaves still shedding
    Drops of tears! '
    Beautiful imagery indeed! 10/10. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 123 Points marvin brato (11/5/2013 11:02:00 PM)

    Very wondrous style of expressing human sentiments! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Ibnu Din Assingkiri (10/18/2013 3:13:00 AM)

    I just love the rain and a little flood as the result of a whole day rain. I love your style in picturing an image of rain at your perspective. thanks for sharing. :) (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,278 Points Tajudeen Shah (10/13/2013 8:58:00 PM)

    Again, thank you very much for such unconditional inspiration. your poem, as always been, inspired me to recollect the premises and just as a child, have had my babbling duly done and submitting. God Bless. a really, highly inspiring craft in the most humblest frame is what you have mastered. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,525 Points Bri Edwards (10/13/2013 4:05:00 PM)

    A Bribe

    with their limbs arm-twisted,
    who will deny the trees tears?
    if you write ME a FUNNY poem,
    i'll share, with you, some beers.

    thanks for the poem, valsa. :) maybe i'd throw in some cheese and crackers also. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 267 Points David Wood (10/12/2013 5:20:00 AM)

    Its that time again for rain, rain and more rain. The Boy Scouts have the motto, 'be prepared' - good advice. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 603 Points Shahzia Batool (10/10/2013 6:33:00 PM)

    Dave walker is spot on...
    it goes in my poems' list for its imagery so realistically presented! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,554 Points Dinesh Nair (10/9/2013 11:45:00 PM)

    The poem scores in both the ways. The request of Mr Kee Thampi is surely honoured and the pleasure of reading such a short poem on the vibrant beauty of rain has been rightly derived. Thank you Madam Valsa for your flexibility. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 2,405 Points Dave Walker (10/9/2013 3:38:00 PM)

    The rain can start in a really gentle relaxing sound, then without warning it can turn into a storm
    of massive proportions. A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 338 Points Danny Draper (10/9/2013 6:59:00 AM)

    Comment in keeping with the Kee request: poem good. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,394 Points Kee Thampi (10/8/2013 10:32:00 AM)

    when we realize with love to read
    .......'' windows turning on their hinges
    And the doors snap open a......'' (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 4,538 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (10/8/2013 9:02:00 AM)

    This poem shows that you can write a surrealistic poem to make one view the twisted objects. Beautifully presented. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 37,362 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (10/8/2013 8:32:00 AM)

    pain brought by rain, When I woke up, I saw
    The land inundated
    Trees, arm twisted
    And the leaves still shedding
    Drops of tears!
    catching lines very effective thank Valsa ma'am (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 3,239 Points Pradip Chattopadhyay (10/8/2013 1:01:00 AM)

    what a beautiful description of rain with imageries for its hidden layers and the superb anti-climax!
    my fav: the last 2 lines (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 606 Points Kavya . (10/8/2013 12:48:00 AM)

    a good one....a beautiful scene created of the storm effect post rains.........leaves still shedding
    Drops of tears! (Report) Reply

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