Ben Paynter

Rookie - 87 Points (Midwest)

And Her Face and Her Words and Her Promises


she says that my face
is the last she sees
before sleep takes her,
and she cannot sleep
without it.

but I know that
there are other faces
that float above
her eyes.
and the stars are out
tonight and I
need them to dance.

“have I said too
much” she says with
a halfhearted question
of love.
no, but you have not
kept your promise
and your promise
has not kept
me.

and all the while
the clock spins circles
on the wall
and a dog barks
at the moon.
and her face sits
resting on my
heart.

I say I need to go
I am tired
and her face
and her words
and her promises
will not let me
rest.

Submitted: Monday, September 18, 2006
Edited: Monday, September 05, 2011

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  • Freshman - 1,446 Points Bernard Snyder (9/26/2014 1:18:00 PM)

    Well Ben, I do hope you got your rest eventually. Congrats' on such a well-deserved vote as 'Poem of the day'. Poem was excellent! I gave a 10' for this one! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 763 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (9/26/2013 11:32:00 PM)

    It's a nice poem...both of you seem to be restlessly in love...Hope the strength of your love brings peace and tranquility in your life...congrats for being Poem of the day. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Morawn Higgs (9/26/2012 8:23:00 PM)

    Not to burst bubbles, but I think it's kind of odd. And maybe a little derivative. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 73 Points Rani Turton (9/26/2012 11:19:00 AM)

    This is the kind of poem I like to read, and read again and let it speak with its own words to me. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tim Stensloff (9/26/2012 10:52:00 AM)

    What a shame it is that this poem, which has been on the site since 2006, just now receives attention. Man, this is a real poem. I'd likely give my pretentions to write a piece this emotive and sense-rendering. I hope this poem doesn't wallow in obscurity. It has too much soul for that. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Bernard Henrie (1/12/2009 7:59:00 PM)

    Ben-

    in stride here, i think. not blind, adolescent love, but a thoughtful, very adult mulling of ideas - as careful to examine the meanings of the loved one as ones own.

    brooding, yet an underpinned lyricism.

    now we're cooking.

    bernie (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Marcia Morris (7/11/2007 2:03:00 AM)

    Great write, you show so much experience in this piece. You are a talented writer. Keep writing. Love this piece! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ari anna arena (6/9/2007 2:21:00 AM)

    Ciao, Ben!
    Simple yet speaks volumes.
    I think often a great poem is precisely that-compact & clear.
    Love your stuff...
    aaa (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Pia Andersson (12/17/2006 6:24:00 PM)

    Your poem is painfully beautiful That is all that I can say the rest stays in my heart -Pia (Report) Reply

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