no rhyme
no rhythm
just fragmented thoughts
caught mid air in a net
and bottled up in a cage
where the circus ringmaster
with a whip of whimsical arbitariness
tames them down
and parades them in a somewhat meaningful pattern
disciplined unruly curs
hoping that the camouflage is good enough
for them to be considered
deceptive enough to be called a poem or
something
ars poetica
an experiment at taming down
unwanted thoughts
a mere experiment into verbalising scattered
nightmares
no metre
no syllable counts or forms
just words meaningless horrible words
that contradict each other
laid down upon a white sheet of paper
one that might have been more useful
in making at least twelve cigarette joints
souren mondal
6.2.16
This piece has grandfathered you, Souren. I wonder sometimes if you are my long lost little brother. Twelve joints might inspire many more poems but this one is a masterpiece of art, philosophy, intellect and literature. Very well done.
Thank you very much Kelly.. I feel the same.. Our skepticism, religious and political views, alongside our zest for Vodka, and perhaps a little cynicism covering our hurt selves at the miserable state of humanity are really signs of it.. If I ever met you someday, I am certain to have a discussion about life and a few beers down first before we talk poetry.. Thanks for being a companion in my poetic journey brother and friend..
I hate to say this given the poet's note about his own poem, but I liked how you wrote it, how you presented an idea about how poetry might be written and how it shouldn't be written. Yet I'm sure there were people who wanted to silence e e cummings for dribbling words down a page for visual impact a la a leaf falls done so much better his way. My personal progress is to read the classics, study the classics, try to write a poem like the classic and then sit down and write my way and watch the old and new blend together after a while and create a new thing of beauty.[if I am fortunate]
Poetry is a broad topic. Poetry is as large as the universe. I believe both Horace and Archibald MacLeish would consider this to be good poetry.
I liked it, waiting to read more by you Souren. I liked your diction.
Your first attempt is fantastic..........................10++++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You have shown an excellent ability to collect your fragmented thoughts and turn them into a fine composition. What starts as a revolt in heart becomes a touching expression so impressive. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
It is exactly the same spirit as you described that goes into a composition of a poem from me.. The thoughts are always there, it is just that there is a struggle to shape them into something that I can call a poem.. The only thing is, if someone asked me - 'What is a poem? ' - I would perhaps have no answers for that! ! And here lies the beauty of poetry..