Age Counts Poem by Afzal Shauq

Age Counts

Rating: 4.9


Girls still look at me
and though they smile...
Their eyes speak
A multitude of words.

Once offering me hearts
No longer I see
My age revealed
by the creases of time

I feel my insides
breaking into pieces.
The hope of the dream...
Vanishes in a cold sigh.
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Poem In Pashto By: Afzal Shauq
Translated in English By: Alley Boling
Book: 'TWIST OF FATES' Poem No.263/Page.336
Web Link: http: //khyberwatch.com/nandara/index.php?
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PDF files: http: //khyber.org/books/ashauq/index.shtml
Poet's weblog: www.tolafghan.com/members/afzalshauq
© Afzal Shauq

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Clementina Gallitelli 12 August 2009

I think this poem is beautiful and very heartfelt.

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Annabel Sheila 16 August 2009

An absolute gem...very strong emotions evoked with your poem. It was hauntingly beautiful! A lovely read...Wow! Anna

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Brianna Cruz 22 August 2009

'through their eyes speaks a multitude of words.' amazing. and most women do think like this. maybe because they dont realize that age is just a number, and so is time. but some people actually think about whats on thee inside; personality wise haha. this poem is amazing and will always stay with me.

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Ro'ya Abdulaal 28 November 2009

Lovely poem, it takes a lot of knowledge and experience to write such a meaningful poem, full of sensations and very sincere

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Breanna Burge 29 December 2009

wow this poem is beautiful and yet again you can tell lots of emotion and effort was put in this... it mustve came straight from the heart cause thats where the best poems come from. Great job keep up the good work! !

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Tremendous write. I honestly dont feel my age, its whats in the heart that matters! Enjoyed; D

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Ana Monnar 25 June 2010

I loved your poem, you earned a perfect 10 from a 56 year old woman.

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Prince Obed de la Cruz 10 June 2010

but still enjoy the warmth of summer, the coolness of winter, the joy of spring, and the blessings of harvest! be inspired always... you write good...

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Lady Grace 09 June 2010

hmmmm, nicely done...

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Hmm a hush poem…nice metaphor… ‘age revealed/by the creases of time’…thanks 10/10 Ms. Nivedita UK

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