Diane Hine

Silver Star - 4,112 Points (25 July 1956)

A Waltz - Poem by Diane Hine

Our foxtrot wasn't good, but then again,
it wasn't bad before, alas, my heel
impaired that poor man's shin and yet I feel
that you were leading rather well ‘till then.

The Samba tempo's captivating thrall
seduced us to abandon Earthly care.
Our spirals had finesse and to be fair,
we only once collided with the wall.

And when I fell, I know you did not gloat,
that was instead, a sympathetic grin.
I swear, it was an accidental spin
which sadly brought my elbow to your throat.

And last, I lightly spun in blissful trance,
a waltz, goodnight and thank you for the dance.

Comments about A Waltz by Diane Hine

  • Freshman - 780 Points Dimitri Jagodinski (4/10/2014 6:17:00 AM)

    Loved this. A true dancing experience. He loved every painful minute. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 10,112 Points Heather Wilkins (9/5/2013 9:47:00 PM)

    a lovely dance and good night (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 26,254 Points Sandra Feldman (8/17/2013 9:49:00 PM)

    Ah the good all times when people used to really fall and sometimes dance.
    The good old times when life was life, not just an unmelodious trance.
    Delightfully amusing, gay and charming poem, Thank you (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,486 Points Patricia Grantham (4/2/2013 12:41:00 PM)

    A truly enjoyed write. I felt pretty dizzy as I was reading it! How about a two step
    next time for me. It was a lot of fun just reading it. Good penning! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,834 Points Ken E Hall (9/16/2012 5:00:00 AM)

    Sounds like a bruising dance on the floor that was saved with the waltz...being a ballroom dancer I found it so funny and enjoyable...regards (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Constance K Yost (9/7/2012 8:02:00 PM)

    This is so cute and fun! Maybe a little two-step? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 33 Points Mark Dillon (9/4/2012 7:54:00 PM)

    Really enjoyed that, what a dance, did ye actually make it off the dancefloor in one piece lol (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Heather Wilson (8/26/2012 1:55:00 AM)

    Such an enjoyable poem, so politely finished. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,113 Points Sally Plumb Plumb (8/25/2012 4:10:00 AM)

    Happily enjoyable. Try my version when you have a spare couple of minutes. Natural Tempo (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 37,022 Points Valsa George (8/25/2012 2:23:00 AM)

    What a humorous scene! I visualize the pair spiralling in ecstatic thrill, forgetting earthly care and even colliding against the wall! ! A beautiful visual! ! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,413 Points Valerie Dohren (8/23/2012 10:19:00 AM)

    The waltz is just about as much as I can manage too, very amusing write Diane, can just picture the scene. Good one: -) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 445 Points Danny Draper (8/22/2012 10:13:00 PM)

    Reminds me of Remeniscing by Little River Band which I heard on the radio yesterday, but you had more fun and less sentimental melancholy, just tortured feet and bruises. Great stuff. Loved the calm but formal ending, very proper. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, August 22, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, September 1, 2012

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