Toheeb Tiamiyu

Rookie - 55 Points (Lagos state, Nigeria)

A Thunderstorm


Whirling from the west,
Madly running without rest,
Sharply, all vests abreast.
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The poem gives us a picture of a storm....the activities of things related to a storm..... 'Lass' in line 8 means leaves.... Line 14 and 15 tells of d change in colour of d atmosphere.....

Comments about this poem (A Thunderstorm by Toheeb Tiamiyu )

  • Rookie - 855 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (7/7/2014 5:39:00 PM)

    nice poem...I like the way it builds up to the climax towards the end... (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 4,965 Points Jayatissa K. Liyanage (7/7/2014 3:36:00 AM)

    I like your metaphoric expressions particularly, in this poem. Nice write. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 267 Points David Wood (7/7/2013 6:32:00 AM)

    Well done on making member poet of the day, very good imagery used in your poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 10 Points Simon Odhiambo (7/11/2012 6:45:00 AM)

    Good use of imagery...I admire this so so so much. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 182 Points Karen Sinclair (7/7/2012 3:04:00 AM)

    Beautifully unusual...pregnant clouds and children engrossed in the weather, singing and dancing...lovely tyvm karen (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anita Sehgal (7/7/2012 2:24:00 AM)

    mood for appreciating the beauty of the rains... well created (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,922 Points Ken E Hall (7/5/2012 5:35:00 AM)

    A day when the clouds look grey and the thunder storms gather and the king trees bow...nice to read in your style...regards (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,016 Points Unwritten Soul (7/3/2012 5:19:00 AM)

    You creating a rhythmic in a nice rhyme, it is another form than the first one i read, again you did a good job..The future still one of the different..i like both of these poem, keep it up for more_Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 27,793 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (6/30/2012 4:53:00 PM)

    This has a nice rhyme scheme...Your structure needs some work so that each line will flow smoothly into the next.Hhowever, for the most part it is in synch, and I enjoyed the read...~FjR~. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 7,236 Points Neela Nath (6/30/2012 9:43:00 AM)

    Lovely picture of cloud as mother of rain.Wow! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Madison Ann (6/30/2012 4:26:00 AM)

    Good poem_! Last part could use work (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 182 Points Karen Sinclair (6/30/2012 4:25:00 AM)

    A lovely write in a traditional form.... enjoyable, well formed and I like that there is much thought in the structure...tyvm.. karen (Report) Reply



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