Jahan zaib

Rookie - 94 Points (February 05,1981 / Malakand Pakistan)

A Thought - Poem by Jahan zaib

A THOUGHT
Should I tell you of a dreadful thought,
That makes me breathless, sobbing and crying,
Without her love my life's a knot,
Without me she's a paper flying,
She wept for all my pains, felt my gloom,
Did not sleep when I was away,
The thought that comes to my mind mom!
Will I weep for you or YOU will mourn me?

Jahan….


Comments about A Thought by Jahan zaib

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (10/9/2013 8:48:00 PM)

    a good poem about mom. good ink (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (10/9/2013 8:48:00 PM)

    a good poem about mom. good ink (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (10/9/2013 8:48:00 PM)

    a good poem about mom. good ink (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,068 Points Kanav Justa (12/24/2012 3:33:00 AM)

    sometimes i too think the same, , , , and yes its really a very dreadful thought, , , , you have penned it down so perfectly, , , fabulous write, , , (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 22,689 Points * Sunprincess * (11/15/2012 9:43:00 PM)

    oh jahan..i would not wish any mother to mourn her child..just today a lady told me her son passed away the 2nd of this month...she said there is nothing worse than losing your child..i felt sorrow for her but at least she still has her grandson..thanks for sharing this one. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 38 Points Heyyou Boy (10/31/2012 11:55:00 AM)

    A good solid poem. These emotions i have more often than not. Well done Jahan! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Stevie Taite (10/18/2012 10:36:00 AM)

    I am sorry but I get from this that you are not close to your mum. You have found this love you need from somewhere/someone else and feel guilty that you do not feel such depth of love for your mum. I could be totally wrong but thats how it reads to me. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Pink Pixie (9/26/2012 10:10:00 PM)

    Wow, that's powerful. Lots of emotion and expression, I enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 24 Points Yoonoos Peerbocus (8/21/2012 5:30:00 AM)

    eternal truth revisited- (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,327 Points Saadat Tahir (7/20/2012 6:42:00 PM)

    nice lines celebrating the institution of motherhood....
    i guess almost all poets have delved into the subject......of course me too...

    The lines are almost religious intense and entrenched, the magic is when ever one reads such lines they seem to catch on and embed in ones psyche....
    this is more specific....a mother and a son.....nostalgia and projection create a powerful mix...and takes you to a thumb sucking aba daba gooo gooo stage..
    very nice loved reading it

    cheers
    :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jenna Chryste (7/19/2012 8:25:00 AM)

    true words........... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (7/13/2012 12:21:00 PM)

    ..................................speechless (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,936 Points Dave Walker (6/12/2012 4:03:00 AM)

    A fantastic poem, the love between mother and son
    is a strong bond. A great write. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 233 Points Mohammad Muzzammil (6/10/2012 3:38:00 AM)

    You have expressed great sorrow in your poems. Your imagery along with words is praiseworthy.Your last two lines have poured down such great pain of your heart.
    May Allah bless you with lots of joy! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Farah Ilyas (6/9/2012 10:27:00 AM)

    The thought that comes to my mind mom!
    Will I weep for you or YOU will mourn me?
    these lines have dreadful sorrow inside, May ALLAH blessed u & ur mother with a lot of blessing indeed (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Praneeth Remidi (6/9/2012 9:51:00 AM)

    thanks for the lines Jahan, the poem is short, sweet and rhyming.... (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,936 Points Marieta Maglas (6/4/2012 5:08:00 PM)

    well written poem dedicated to a mother-thank you for sharing (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,467 Points Unwritten Soul (6/3/2012 11:22:00 AM)

    Beautiful thought beautiful lines, your mind is full of her cares and it written all over in your poetry...and the result is a nice poetry..Thanks for inviting, keep writing Jahan_Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 164 Points Joseph Poewhit (6/3/2012 8:03:00 AM)

    Mom's, just know more than the offspring (Report) Reply

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