# # A Sudden Turn (With Haiku Version - My Very First!) Poem by Sonya Florentino

Sonya, I have to say I prefer your Haiku version. It is more eloquent and leaves the reader more space to 'see' your image. What a stunning image, by the way! And so interesting to watch the gestation of a poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

I like the haiku version slightly better, it gives me a little work t do, Doesn't interpret it for me. But both are beautiful poems. the first more imagist, the haiku not only fits the syllable count of the form, but captures the moment with fresh imagery of nature, the season is intimated as summer and for all I know water lilies is a kigo or season word for summer anyway. And most importantly it resonates with deeper meaning. my favorite lines are: 'water lilies re-arrange space in the water'

good imagination Sonya...thanks...10

Oh yes, quite perfect haiku...well done Ruthy

Your first haiku has my applause, dear Sonya. Warm wishes, Sandra

The haiku version is better. It might be stronger as haiku with a definite antithesis in both stanzas.

Well articulated and nicely brought forth with artistic brilliance. Thanks for sharing and do remain enriched.

Love the haiku version. -c

very nicely done and you could change this into a Tanka too

i'm dumb struck.............