A Nudge To Marry Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

A Nudge To Marry

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I won’t simply marry
As you have failed to carry
You failed to make me merry
You were impossible and funny

You were feeling sorry
It was not matter for worry
I was ready and well prepared
You did not understand me and compared

“Please stop it for God’s sake”
Life is not like sweet cake
You just be serious and be awake
You don’t realize what is at stake”

It sent me nervous shock
My mouth remained dry and blocked
Thick smoke emerged and rose again
I was not in position to regain

She was furious as if river in spate
I had no proper words to state
It is easy to control the irate mob
But not sensible ladies who always sob

“I loved you so much and longed
You never came up to expectations and wronged
How was I expected to go with you long way?
When you had no definite idea or simple way? ”

I can read your words and lines
In no way our relation undermine
I am in no hurry till you decide
I must reveal all and closely confide

You may have your apprehensions and misgivings
Still we had all gestures of fine loving
I was sure of my self and made good moving
I knew there is none for me so lovely and caring

You may come and knock the door one day
I will wait for that fine moments to have say
Moon may feel shy to throw the silver ray
I will not care for anybody or attention pay


I feel like rushing towards her
She may refuse but not surrender
She had no worry for cloud’s thunder
She was weary of my committing blinder

Will she be willingly coming to terms?
Was her mind was infested with doubtful germs?
What should be done to win her over?
I have no ready made ground or fine cover

She can’t say no to our relation
Any deviation is out of question
I am for her and she is for me forever
There may be some temporary setbacks however

Prove to the world that this is holy message
There may be long duration with smooth passage
I have none to offer as mark of respect
I shall remain faithful and try to introspect

I find no reason now for her saying “no”
She may find difficult to use the word “go”
It may coincide with happiest moments
Time may come when there may be some movement

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Cat Tiger 30 March 2010

You seem to have trouble with your 'Eastern' attitude toward women. You may be demanding something from her that she doesn't understand, which causes your impressions of resistance to your love. It is simpler not to ask for love but rather give love. If it is done with reverence, it will be returned without conflict. As for the poem itself, you are struggling with the language...especially rhyming. You also changed point of view from speaker to observer...this is a rather severe fault.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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