A Doggerel Poem by Xelam Kan™

Penned by Mr Bri Edward....... JOHN, A doggrel Heard from sages, that only words can change; [thanks for the semicolon here (above) ] the world and ages... [ i'm guessing that these tiny dots, after 'ages', are a sign that you have stopped composing one thought, 'the world and ages....', and you have started to write another thought with 'but my tongue......'. that makes sense to me! ] but my tongue has been fettered and pen gets sterile, and words those often resonate [ i would write.....(IF i understand this section properly) .... 'words WHICH often resonate'. ] in minds die in freezing dark..... [here, again, you used a small series of 'periods'/'tiny dots'........which are a little difficult for me to see on the screen....but i agree with their usage by you. ] and nobody knows where heaven lies? [ I surely DON'T KNOW WHERE 'it' LIES! ] in a painted smiles or [ i would use 'in painted smiles or' OR 'in a painted smile or' ] in a heart, goes wild. [ 'in a painted smile or in a heart, goes wild'..............they sound like good places to find 'heaven', but i would use 'gone wild', not 'goes wild', at least the way i am reading the poem. ] WELL, JOHN, IT TOOK A WHILE FOR ME TO WORK THROUGH THIS POEM [NOT too LONG], BUT WHEN I AM DONE....I DID/DO LIKE IT. THANKS for sharing. bri :) p.s. 'dog·ger·el 'dôg? r? l, 'däg-/ noun noun: doggerel 1. comic verse composed in irregular rhythm. verse or words that are badly written or expressed. 'the last stanza deteriorates into doggerel' Origin late Middle English (as an adjective describing such verse) : apparently from dog (used contemptuously, as in dog Latin) + -rel. JOHN, i did not find it 'comical', but i really did like it. i especially enjoyed the lines: 'but my tongue has been fettered and pen gets sterile, and words those often resonate in minds die in freezing dark...'...............except that i thought 'which' sounds better to me than 'those'. :) ===============================

nobody knows where heaven lies? in a painted smiles or in a heart, goes wild. Now that is sheer poetry! , your doggerel parameter truly know great lines. Fantastic!