A Disfortunate Case Poem by Barry Van Allen

A Disfortunate Case

Rating: 2.8


I suppose I should be thankful,
that you're not ' oozing ' on my floor,
- - - you're SO full of it,
that I doubt that even you,
are a believer anymore.

Then again... I know,
because I've watched you lose your way,
that you don't know exactly,
what you are shoveling today.

I wouldn't be a bit surprised,
to find you in a hole,
surrounded by your bullshit,
... collapsing on your soul.

Now, here's what's really sad,
the gullible keep buying it,
giving you encouragement,
and you even seem to find,
some disturbing virtue in it.

As your friend , I have to stop you,
before you hurt yourself,
it's time for you to get some help,
... admit it now,
... admit it to yourself,
you are a salesman, and you can't help it !

- - - NOW, it's up to you,
- - - I did what I could do!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Diane Violet 11 September 2007

Once again I find myself repeating what's already been said by those who have commented before me. A disturbing and I imagine a bit difficult poem to write. It's not buyer beware but more buyer be aware...a good salesperson will state the pro's and con's...it's about service (helping) not salesmanship (Imo) .....All the best, Diane

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Dee Daffodil 10 September 2007

Judging by the fact that you said the intended reader was your friend, this must have been a bit difficult for you to write. Honesty is the best policy. I tend to not have a lot of time for salespeople (either professional or not) . Perhaps it's because I usually (admittedly...not always) see through all the glitz and glamour (ok...B.S! !) to the truth of what is really being sold...or the motivation behind it. Hugs, Dee

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Cynthia Yildirim 08 September 2007

disturbing and slightly deep, good poem

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