A Beam Of Light Poem by Aya Alkassab

A Beam Of Light

Rating: 4.0


This world is wide
But you are all alone
You smile because you have to smile
And all your pains have grown
And when you stay alone you cry
And then you dry your eyes
Because you see inside your pains
A beam of light
And 'cause your sight
Becomes so strong and it goes far
Nearby the heavens like a star
And it sees more and more
And in your heart there is something
That you cannot ignore
It is something obscure but you
Can see it clear
Can touch it and can feel its warmth
So it gives you some strength
Some power taken from the fires
That burn inside all your desires
Some holy flames
That like a sun
Which warm your heart
And give life to the seeds
That lie beneath the grownd
Don't let yourself
But off the flames
cause life needs pain
And pain gives heat
And this heat is what makes you live

Note: Hello poets! I'm an Arabian girl, and this is my first poem in English.
I need your help, advice, and criticism.

Wednesday, July 23, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: hope
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mohammad Skati 03 August 2014

It's a pretty poem in which the poetess expresses herself very well. It's a pretty starting for her. There is a deep philosophy in it. I feel the whole poem. Good luck, poetess Aya.

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Ahmed Abomahfouz 23 July 2014

in your poem there is positive thinking, but your likening is naive , also the ideas are not connected smoothly but great 1st step

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Kassem Oude 23 July 2014

Hello Aya, your poem is beautiful and reveal a soul deep and sincere and contains many rhymes. For me I appreciate more a completely rhymed poems. I encourage you to do so even if it costs you more time.

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